This sounds pretty good, but w/o reading the 1st or 3rd parts, it's unclear what has/will transpire. I still think it's worthy to be read.

This sounds like something out of Revelations. I'm not Bible buff, but in the 18->20th chapters, It talks about visions of seeing the "beast" in its varied forms, and how it was cast into the fire and brimstone. Sounds like this would go in a religious magazine.

Great song; I really liked it.

This is super. Publish it.

Great poem.

Excellent poem there. What is "indite"? Just curious.

This sounds like you're talking about a politician or maybe a mystery man.

It was hard to read, but then I was under the influence of fatigue :D It sounds like a fine story. As far as the international flare you're asking, it may go over well if you cut the street slang or revise for clarity.

it's great; keep it goin'. Please check mine out.