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I like literature. Art. Music. People. People I don’t know. Cheese. TV. Movies. Coffee. shirts. no shirts. abs. tea. soda. friends. car rides. no plans. intuition. lack of destination. etc.
I don’t like cats. bad teeth. raw tomatos. cooked carrots. most reality TV. let downs. build ups. vomit. broken leaf rakes. summer heat.
I war with myself. time. art. objectivity. openness. concepts and mindsets.
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A-I-M: jppffloyd
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We had decided that there was no reason to dance with the robots inside that place, and so we slipped off our shoes, dug our feet deep into sand flecked with tree bark and bits of litter, and danced our own way. Really the barefoot idea was James’s, as he went that way most everywhere, even in school. He would put his sandals in his pockets during our breaks—between classes—and let his feet stand on the cold, tile floors. It was a concert, on this particular night, when everything was as div...
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Letter writer's logic is baffling Re "Don't blame Mohammad, Islam," April 10 letter by the Rev. Michael G. Cole: Cole tells us we shouldn't blame Islam for Islamic terrorists and that he is troubled by people who do. Well, Rev. Cole, I am troubled by Islamic terrorists who murder innocents in the name of Islam. Not blaming Islam for the motivations of Islamic terrorists is like not blaming racism for terrorist acts committed by the Ku Klux Klan. Cole then asks if we would also blame the actio...
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New CHS Club speaks Out Loud about Discrimination By: Joshua Floyd Stand amongst your friends. Sit quietly at your lunch table, and take a moment to listen. Amongst the laughter and the gossip, amongst the chatter and the attitudes and smiles, any student is bound to hear, at one point, what they don’t want to. Conway High School is one of the leading schools in the Horry County School system, yet, on any given day, every student may face a limitless amount of discrimination, prejudice, and c...
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…and here I am again -josh floyd 1/20/05 i make people pity me ... at least that's what i've been told i guess that's a bit bold to do or cowardly to try and make people see that it's not all that it's cracked up. the days that we are in that is they are nothing but distant memories in a lifetime later i measure lifetimes not by one span but one cycle of time and pick and pan through ruin and disgrace and the faces of the people that don't know you and do know you. a lifetime is a place no ta...
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Pedestals The phone call had come a bit early. Early, that is, for it to be one of those “something’s wrong calls.” Those calls that hit the lines at 2 AM and make you jump and then curse and flail in the dark. “Who the fuck! Is calling!?” You feel that anger and confusion wash over and dilute itself with worry. “Wait.” You think…”now just wait a minute.” Some wheels turn, your thoughts race and scramble for position; some discard themselves and the rest scamper about, stacking and ordering a...
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Excellent example of farcical prose. Very entertaining...especially with the repetitive use of onomatopoeia. (WHOOSH!). I'll keep it short and say that the sarcasm and dry humor is exemplary. The final line of dialogue is charming. Good, good job.
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Alright, this is one of the best things I've read since I joined Urbis. Your diction and stylization build up a real, fleshed out character, as opposed to some of the hollow names in other stories. I especially appreciate your integrated thought patterns in the narratives. If I would offer any one piece of criticism, it would be to naturalize your dialogue some more. It seems to pop up sometimes when it's not expected. Otherwise, very impressive, I scored you a 9.
Standalone, there's not a whole lot of plot to make much of. However, the dialect work is always a fun twist (accents and such), and the fantasy genre is one of my favorites. The world can be uniquely your own, in this story, so don't hesitate to craft it as complex or as simple as you see fit.
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Take this solely as an attempt at helpful criticism, I ask you!: The dialogue is well written. The pacing of the verbal interchange is quite effective and helps move the story. However, I'd venture to say that your narratives often turn into simple objective reports of the setting. This, while informative, is somewhat tiring. Plot-wise, I know very little about this line of stories you are/have been working on, but I think that the overall significance neutralizes itself with your good dialog...
Alright, I'll keep it short and sweet....and this is gonna hurt, so I apologize...I really like to give good reviews. The concept of the evil twins is always fun to play around with....and the murder is fun as well. You do admit that it's your first work,though, and I would venture to say that your dialogue and pacing are just not fitting with something that could be a pretty interesting tale. Stuff like: “Yes, Mrs. Yveldenberg, you were saying?â Eberlee said as his curiosity grew. “My boys a...
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