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American ex-pat learning to swim in a sea of Britishness.
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"Ah, Miranda, how wonderful to see you again," Camilla walked over and enveloped me in a gossamer haze of musky perfume. I held my breath, smiled and leaned in for the obligatory air-kisses. Her lips sounded wet so close to my ears and for one irrational moment, I thought of turning my head to kiss her. Camilla slid a hand across my waist and steered my deeper into the house. "I'm so glad you finally came to a party," she whispered as she nodded to another guest and smiled, "I've been dying t...
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LOL - Love it! I've read a few of these and all have been terribly seriously and so this came as a very refreshing change.
I'm not much of a fan when it comes to poetry so the 9 is more for making me wish this were a sort story I could really sink my teeth into.
I'm not terribly good wit query letters so I'm afraid I can't say for certain if I think this will leave an agent or publisher wanting more but I can say that it makes me interested in reading the book. The only reservation I would have is that the two main characters seem to have a similar feel t the X-Files. If this is just an unfortunate coincidence which is completely dispelled by the book then ... well, no problem. Good luck
For the 6-word opportunity it's connected to, it works. I did, however, have to look up enervates. That could just be because I'm a bit thick but perhaps "exhausts" would be a good alternate? Just an idea.
In relation to the 6-Word-Memoirs it fits but on its own, it doesn't. if you simply intended it for that Opportunity, then well done, I think you've hit the nail on the head. If you mean for it to stand on its own, then not so much.
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