Nicely done. I could say you could add a bit more of detail, but I'd be sounding like my friend who dogs me about it like a 'super mother hen'. I like how you changed up the who mythical creature thing. Its not everyday that people do that and its a unique thing. Keep up the good work.

Wow...Wow. I love it. I myself am I gamer to those kind of games and this just blew my mind. I love how you described everything, well done. Especially when fantasy and reality started to blur. Amazing. Although, I got a little confused when the chat in the game stopped being italic, but I caught on really quickly. You should finish it. I really would love to know what happens next.