The opppsites that you create in the four lines are really good. The image drawn is also very nice. I would like to add two lines instead of your 2 lines Despite knowing the history, there remains a mystery, What is it that seduces me, towards the deep blue sea.

Well, today is my first day at Urbis and I must say that the pace at which reviews are flowing in is amazing. The only word that I can use to describe is Dynamic. I have been a part of other poetry sites where the skill level is amazing but there is no credit system in place. As a result a few lesser-skilled writers like me get over shadowed and dont get our share of reviews. Having read your article, I feel that I have come at the right place...

What I figure out from this quote is that one should be original rather than copying others

this seems to be a personal dediction from you to your friend... Title is perfect, Start is ok, Finishing punch is so-so.

I am pretty much speechless. I have heard a lot about the war and how its a big mistake; I seriously am at loss of words. The story starts well. Connecting the past to the present and concluding that nothing has changed much, was the perfect way to describe the war. I also agree that watching news on TV and experiencing the things first hand are two altoghether different experiences... I really liked the article..

First page: The start is interesting. About the cold weather and the struggle of the protaganist to find some warm place. Cool curiosity factor has gripped me now as the start has glued me to the story. Second page: Now the plot of the story is coming up. The protaganist is homeless and has divorced parents. Third page: I still dont know if the lead person is male or female.. Fourth+Fifth page: A new character comes into the picture; Mr. Wilson. The other character Mr Bob was mentioned in sec...

The idea is good. Though I may not be a very good at reviewing I felt that the quote is a lttle lengthy. I presume that after semicolon the sentence that follows should be able to stand immediately...Over here it seems there is an issue with fragmentation.

A few weeks ago I had written a poem in a similar topic called THe chosen. The poem is there at urbis.com. The loss that you talk about is such that we just cant compare it with any thing. You have given various ways of overcoming the grief. This is a very good article for all the women who have gone through such a situation. I dont have many words but I would certainly recommend this article to everyone;

this is a feeling that so many poets go through; I mean when the muse goes missing and when nothing is there to write. Infact every poem must have written something on these lines in their career. The brilliant thing about poetry is that it can be also written on a topic called "nothing is there to be written". As a poet I can relate to how you feel. The comparisions about the singer and the painter you draw are also place very well.