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AGE: 15
LOC: Australia
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 20

I am what I am…..does that help?
I’m a very driven person. I’m often compared to Elaine from Seinfeld, a feminist but one of the boys. When you read my work don’t be scared I’m not some freak nut who writes letters in blood or murders people, the reason I write what I write is due to a fascination with the way serial killers think. I hope you enjoy my work.
-Jodie

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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Tempest Chapter 2
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2 Reviews   3 Comments
Chapter 2 Balboa Park San Diego California From 9.00pm December 10th 2002 I jogged down to the crime scene. My partner Chris Chambers and my boss Ron Kennedy at my side. An area of bustling men and women seemed to give the otherwise quiet park life. Yellow and black crime scene tape flagged off the area where I assumed the victim would be. ‘Agent Sloane Conway, FBI,’ I said as I flashed my badge at the young male cop who was clearly attracted to me. I ignored his wandering eyes and passed und...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Chapter 1 The Tempest
Version 4
1 Review   8 Comments
Chapter 1 Abandoned warehouse, San Diego California December 8th 2002 ‘Do you know who I am?’ Chimera asked as he paced the room, his large feet echoing on the rotten wooden floorboards. He looked at the small boy. His eyes, although immobile, screamed fear and agony, a feeling Chimera himself had lived with for the last four years, and they were the years he remembered. He picked up the Zippo. You are Joannie Sceats,, never change, Love Raven. Chimera studied the engraving. Good old Joannie,...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Prologue to the Tempest
Version 6
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Prologue Kings Storage garage, California July 16th 1998 7.12pm Adrenaline pumped through my body as I neared the sliding door. ‘KINGS STORAGE’ was printed in bold black letters across the middle of it. My hands slid over the cold steel and with great effort I pulled it upwards, creating a loud clattering noise. A burst of light flooded the dark room where my father stood, small drops of blood splattered across his face. ‘Room for one more?’ My deep voice was exaggerated by the concrete walls...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Blog of upcoming book The Tempest
Version 4
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The Tempest How can you chase after two serial killers while running from your own past? Sloane Conway, a firey twenty two year old FBI Agent living in San Diego is a haunted woman. A 5'10" stunner, formely known as Joannie Sceats, Sloane grew up in a world no child should ever know. Her father (Ethan), a hitman for the Irish mafia trained her from the day she could walk. Ethan, sent to jail after murdering her mother before her eyes at the age of eleven, is released after seven years. Joanni...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Pooh in Meatspace (part 2)
needler. After - this has an extra space. mindeye. - isn't this saying 'minds' eye? Cornripper ghetto. - I like this reference, very cheeky. kind. I rose - this has extra extra spacing, run through your work, you've done it a few times. I like this. You have a great ending and you definitely have an odd, punny sort of humour which definitely lightens the mood of an almost sad story - at least that's what I got from it.
ploy against that a terrible boy. - a comma after that would give more of a bang. This is certainly a dark kind of humorous story, it certainly made me laugh. I only found the one critique, other than that your work flows well and is certainly interesting. Well done
Action Adventure / Jac'Kul Part 3
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Novel Treatments / Pixie Dust- Lights in the Sky
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Novel Treatments / 2024
from his childhood home - full stop at the end of 'home' and impaled - extra space. So, under Dadhyanka’s command, - omit 'so' it will make your work flow better. This is an intersting story although I have no idea what the end is supposed to mean? Is their more? Overall you have great descriptivness and an interesting narrative.
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