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I am nothing…I am nothing…I am nothing… But one with the lost souls on the infinite seas. Minds burnt, churned, overturned, and burdened By illusionist ambiguities of boundaries Forever cascaded into infinity by self identity and inescapable society. Sails stretched, erect, and set. Ready to etch my presence, steadied in contempt With conceptions of a compass' guidance into the depths of my soul's truest intent. A far cry from generations of past. Wisdom from the old, gained through questions...
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It's been some odd number of solar revolutions since I can remember The presence of innocence in my life. Roots established, leaves reaching for the sky, of course wondering why? But guilty for the absense of innocence in my life. It aint my fault? Or is it? I mean, a fish don't know it swims in water. Until it's condemned by the grip of a predator And THEN it acknowledges what is alien before it's slaughter. But, then again, A fish don't even know it swims. Let alone to bother with notions a...
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Heaven is not a place that you go to when you die, it's just that moment in life when you actually feel alive.
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Most quotes are ambiguous. Actually, come to think of it almost everything is ambiguous and abstract. Meaning and reason is all up in the air, we just interpret what we feel best reflects whats in ourself, and from that we have intuition.
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I am my rock. I am my island. But, who is my ocean?
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This is VERY goood! I reall really enjoyed the overall structure to this poem. Your rhyming methods have a very creative pattern. Much kudos on that. But, whta i found to be most artistically creative was how your incorporated the brain into your poem through literal and metaphorcal interptretations. More Kudos for that...a VERY good read. I went through it maybe 5 to 6 times. A 10 out of 10 for sure!
i liked it. the description of your inner-thoughts was well written. I the admire your choice of words and memories used to describe the looks your father gave you. Im from California. I've lived in North Carolina for a bit, but I got to see most of the east coast. The only differences between here and there are the speed and pacing of traffic, and we got better bud! Notice how I use the word 'we'. What is also different about California is that we do sometimes think of our self as a differne...
this is a decent piece. i like the basis for this poem, using a flower as a metaphor for the typical life cycle of an individual. some parts of your poem take on a brief ryming scheme like this part: He sees his life, and where he has made mistakes. Still scared sometimes, but he understands. That life is full of chances, some of which You have to take. ryhming is not all that poetry is about, but it does grasp the attention of the reader, and it creates a natural flow to a poem. if i were yo...
I can really see these song being used as country song lyrics. It comes full and complete with the build-up that leads into the heartbreak, just like every other country song. What throws off the rhythm of it all I would say that the third line is too long. You might want to shorten it a little and chuck in a rhyme at the end too.
Nice quote! It's true how the subconcsious of a person is what best reflects the truest self of that person. We as humans tend to put up fronts with our verbal communication. But, as in a tear, we communicate upon various levels. Good shit man, very deep too!
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