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AGE:
17
LOC: Tucson, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 17
LOC: Tucson, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 17
I love writing. I hope to write a book one day. I am a terrible critic to myself. I find myself to write even when I don’t mean to. Sometimes when I am doing vocabulary for english class. I am 16, live in Arizona and can’t put books down. My favorite author would be Scott Westerfeld and Stephenie Meyer.
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This was the moment that would forever change his life, the moment that would meet her. He had always known of her existence, he had never before encountered her in the real world. He slid through the crowd of enemies and allies, and realized through the centuries of war this had been the most peaceful he had seen both sides. Yet, they all argued amongst themselves like little children, good thing the neutral King and Queen of the North were here to keep "order". Looking to the side of the r...
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It was good, but I would have to say work on clarity, I was confused slightly while reading and I had to go over a few lines over again to understand. With some work I think this could be an amazing poem.
I liked this it could be an amazing song if the right music was put behind it. It is entertaining and it is really true. I would work on a chorus line and make it into a song and no doubt it will be great.
I thought that it was well written, I like how it was somewhat vague but still told you enough to get an idea. Being vague is good and bad, it kept me some what interested but not completely. I would want to read further just to see what was happening, I would say continue to write it is a great start.
When I first started reading this I didn't think I would get really into it, but as I continued on it caught my attention. The only thing that I thought could of been explained more was Wiz transforming into a mouse. Other then that I could see this be an excellent book, I would read this. Continue up the great work.
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