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AGE: 27
LAST LOGIN: January 12

I will just say a little bit about my artistic vision of the world. I am interested in how the mundane and normal can actually become the strange and frightenning. Something like a painting of Francis Bacon or a film by David Lynch. Pealing away the layers of reality to find the darkness that hides within the light.

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Anger drives me forward. A vow to destroy. A pledge of sacrifice. Strengthening the spirit. Stepping out of flesh. Unbound by obstacles. Focused on a never ending quest. Ending the day more complete. Waking, the cycle repeats.
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Short Story / Family Dinner in Hell
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The turkey hasn't been carved. My father stands over it holding a knife as my mother dressed like a dominatrix whips him. He is a gimp ready to welcome any punishment. My mother whips him again and the welts spring open letting a stream of blood flow down his back. The rest of the family eyes the turkey greedily. My aunt, a former miss teen something or other and high school homecoming queen, licks her lips while her vulture husband pecks at the mashed potatoes. The shards of her broken tiara...
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The decaying corpses walk through the grocery store with a bouquet of roses in one hand and a heart shaped box of chocolates in the other. Their skin drops to the floor in clumps as they leave slimy trails as footprints. I picked the wrong day to venture out. I weave my way through the horde hunting the supplies I need. I rush towards the meat at the back of the store. I am on a mission. I know what I am here for. They slither along stopping at random intervals to inspect anything that catche...
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One day they will find me, dressed for bed, propped against the wall as if ready to read before succumbing to sleep. However a pistol will be in place of a book, clinched tightly in my fist. Red blood and yellow brain matter splattered across my wall like a Jackson Pollack masterpiece. No one will see it coming. All my family and friends will tell the paper how I had everything going for me. My boss will say I was hardworking and dedicated to my job. The last person anyone would suspect, whic...
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Poetry / Bedtime
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The façade is broken. Daytime shatters. Darkness seeps. Reality fades. Dreams invade. As waking turns to sleep.
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Poetry / Prisoner
This poem is a good exploration of how we can become trapped in a bad situation. Of how we can see a way out but just can't get to it. How we are held back by an unseen force that just won't allow us to be free of the pain. It is also open enough so that maybe the speaker doesn't truly wish to escape, but that they actually enjoy the pain. That it gives them purpose.
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This poem is a good look into child like wonder and how the world is viewed through the eyes of a child. I like the fact that you use the symbol of the woods since it is often a symbol for being lost and confused but instead you make it a symbol for wonder. I think this is a great little poem and it ends nicely with an optimistic view of how there is always more wonder to be found in the world.
Poetry / Never Planted
I thought that this was a cute little entertaining poem. I enjoyed the double meanings of some of the phrases.
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I liked how everything was opposite of what one would expect. Like the "lush desert," "cold sun," and other such things. I however think that the two times you used the word now it was not needed and would make the writing stronger without it. I think the last lines of it are also not needed. It is insulting to the reader. If the reader understands the poem correctly then those last two lines are redundant.
This poem has a lot of good images and ideas in it, but I think it could be cleaned up and made a little neater. There are just too many words in it and I think it would be more powerful with a few less words.
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