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AGE: 37
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 14

Hi there!  I’m glad you clicked.  Now what can I tell you about myself to explain what I’m doing here?  

I was born thirty-odd years ago on the Canadian prairies, where the winters teach both strength and an appreciation of things to do indoors.  My love was words.  I started writing poetry in early primary school and have always had a book in my hand.  Although I was often encouraged to seek publication of my work, it just never seemed a priority to do so.  Once a poem was written, its purpose was served and I saw no reason for its journey to continue.  

I went to college twice. First time was to study “Creative Communications” where my writing really began to take shape, to have structure and definition (and very unusual line bre…

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Version 1
5 Reviews   2 Comments
Pendulum never did swing on the clock we got for a wedding present. 2 months later the hands just stopped. Now it sits on the back of an antique trunk. Another broken pretty thing. Dust covered books of failed ambition. Self-help this and D-I-Y that. Improvement contemplated and abandoned like a half-grown hairstyle. Broken spines and rusty old limbs. Covered in cobwebs trapping dust in my hair. Coughing and wheezing from dirt and miasma. Sickness settles in my lungs my soul. Skin like cellop...
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Poetry / Acid Trip
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7 Reviews   0 Comments
Getting disco in the head. Your eyes slipped below the horizon long ago but the tape you put in still plays. Vinyl seating rumbles to an obnoxious bass line. Static hiss of leader tape and I let space go silent. Now only the whoosh of the wipers and the inclement drum roll on the roof keep me company. We haven’t spoken since Swift Current. Spikes of twin lamps cut an inhospitable greeting, and fade. Four and a half feet of bruise ahead, spitting ions randomly. Mother Nature is no lady. Just a...
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Poetry / Submerge
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7 Reviews   3 Comments
Can’t shake the fire webbing from my eyes. My ankles grow heavy as my wrists seek a distant surface to break. Your hand was on my hip one moment and waving goodbye the next. No held breath before the cold hit me bone deep. Only the distorted shift of refraction is constant, though beyond relevance now. Organza faces and blubbery giggles are all that seep through the mercury. Muted bubble of prayer. Held under in those final fleeting seconds. Clawing for purchase in spacious molecules. My dest...
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Version 1
7 Reviews   1 Comment
Weathered that winter, but not well. Shuttling about the streets even as the ice dug its claws in. Running from the door of the apartment block to the wind shelter of the car. Slow enough to avoid slipping, never fast enough to keep the cold from wracking my bones. Pluming breath onto the windshield, carrying a silent prayer that the engine will turn over this time. This was before God became persona non grata. Never said I didn’t Believe, just refused to sing. Storm of the Century came and l...
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Poetry / Acquiescence
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13 Reviews   7 Comments
The pace was always yours. Five ravenous years to tell you what a stinking bastard you are. Yeah, I could wait till you finished lunch. Feign interest in the stuffed puffer fish and a descending shrine of Jack Daniels bottles. Brown walls littered with autographed posters of big-breasted strippers. Other than the slightly nauseating odour of store-bought spaghetti sauce, it smelled the same as always. As the many times I had lain on your bed before. The flowers I sent are dried on the toilet ...
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Lyrics / homemade knife
I like this. At first I wasn't sure about using the word "guts" as you did, but as I read further it does fit the tone of the whole piece better, and far superior to the cliche of a knife in the back. (you were right. you were right. --haha) The only glitch for me was "amnesiac dancers go sleeping".... go ON sleeping? It's unclear if they just keep sleeping or the tune puts them to sleep. I liked the phrases dead-eyed sisters and six pistol preachers; Bones of the moon is particularly vivid a...
Poetry / Movements
Beautiful piece. There is some ambiguity as to exactly what "he" is (fetus, child, bird, small animal...)especially on first read, but once I got it (or think I did, something clicked in my own mind anyway, which counts just as much when interpretation is left to the reader) I appreciated that vague quality all the more. One need not be in exactly your situation to relate to the feelings of nurturing and love you write about. Assuming the poem is about pregnancy, your descriptive language is ...
Poetry / Half
Locked
Poetry / A Still Life
It's an interesting, if somewhat pessimistic, idea. The title does fit well; the irony is probably the least cliched aspect of the poem. The first two lines read like a dictionary of cliches, in fact. If the clock feels no remorse, is it fair then to anthropomorphize it with "relentless taking"? Either make the clock (time) a genuine antagonist, or keep it completely neutral. I'd like to see this lengthened, and given more solid imagery. You have the bones of a poem with some power here, it j...
Poetry / Helios In Flight
I'm not really one for rhyming poems, but you did a decent job with this. You have some good imagery and captured some powerful emotions about a subject that's not often written about anymore. (One could say the sun has fallen out of favour as an object of worship with the abandoning of pagan religions --but that's a whole different topic!) My issues are in the repetition of the word "willing" used so close together (lines 12 and 13) and your metre changes in the last stanza. As an aside, is ...
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