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AGE:
23
LOC: Youngstown, OH
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 15
LOC: Youngstown, OH
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 15
im a lost 21 year old who has survived child abuse, drug abuse, and suicide. I am the lead singer/songwriter of a band known as the Moo Moo Mafia. I am currently a college student at Youngstown State University in Youngstown, Ohio. I am majoring in Accounting which in all reality is the opposite end of the spectrum from writing. I just recently lost my younger brother to the hands of suicide.
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Tell me to take it And I will never let go Tell me to walk away And I will never look back Tell me to hate And I will stop loving. I do all things for you No longer live for me Ive cancelled myself out of my life The moment you cancelled me out of yours I no longer have a need to live. Ive bled myself dry countless times Ive choked on my last breath more than once Ive pulled the trigger to the end. But my heart wont let me go. Even broken it still beats for you. We go back and forth Love and ...
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When I was lost in the dark You showed me the light When I had given up You showed me I still could You gave me the hope of all love And I let it slip away. But I didn't allow it to fall far It was always in reach Just waiting for me to grab it Well that's what I have done I have grabbed it for you. I know my words mean nothing And I'm learning to translate into action I just don't want you to forget me I've carved your name in my face So I will never forget you. You are my life when I have d...
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I never thought it would come to this We have reached a standstill in life I love you You hate me We come face to face As we exfoliate our pain on each other I pull the gun up to my head I'll pull the trigger Just to make you happy Blood for blood Tear for tear I give you my heart I give you my life I've worked up the nerve To give you what you wanted Tonight I will leave your life It will be quick I promise I will smile on the way down As I watch your face Turn into my blood's new home Blood...
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This is my final goodbye My last statement to the world I feel the cold silver Settle upon my lips Ive waited so long for this I can feel my heart race As I pull my finger back I hear the click The time is now I exhale a breath As the pain flows through my brain.
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I find myself alone tonight Drowning away my life In a pool of alcohol and blood Each empty bottle A lost memory of you Each deep cut A release from the pain I feel my heart race My pulse quickens I take another sip And drill another hole into my arm Tonight I bleed for you Tomorrow I die for me Blood is my release from the pain The bottle a release from you Breaths starts to shorten It seems I hit a main line I feel the blood rush on out The pain follows on course I watch them drip to the fl...
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true emotion produces the best lyrics. and that is exactly what you have here. I can feel all the anger and rage flowing from this piece. And I can relate to it also as someone who has never had an ounce of respect for my mother. You really start out with a powerful verse and build on that throughout. great flow--I definitely could hear the beat in my head. And I also enjoyed the spoken ending. It made me chuckle a little. Overall great job
what you have hear is a good beginning to a preteen type book. The subject of divorce and how it affects the child is a hard one to touch but i think you handle it well. You do a good job of building up suspense, throughout you make it seem like something bad is about to happen then all of a sudden some comedic element is thrown in there. But it is a perfect ending to this part. I hope I can read more.
You definitely start out strong. I like how you jump from poetry into like story form. The second stanza of "poetry" for some reason to me blends together too much. I think it may be the use of weigh so many times. I simply could not stop reading. This is something that hits home for me because I have went through a similar situation myself. And you finished it beautifully. I can say i was not expecting that ending at all. Great job.
i could feel my heart starting pumping through this poem. you do a great job of using imagery to capture emotion. I wanted to reach out and caress the bird. I think you have a wonderful flow and perfect placement of description. great job.
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