I see some very powerful imagery and metaphors here. The best: "I, a fissure in the sidewalk" kool because of the darkness you would encompass being a crack. "Pink bloom of the rose, wind kissed"- gorgeous! "She spins on circle oF winking ice" winking ice is noice i like that suggests she's figure skating to me. i dont think she is but ya know "A pirouette In ode to the night My soul like ice crystals on trees A land of glass shimmering" I assume you've done this 9 times or more before(i'm ho...

funny funny funny. I especially delighted in the didnt feel like bowling anymore line. Yeah defininely expand it some-maybe a little bit on how the zombies got the upperhand? if not its okay to leave it to the imagination. Some people need every littl thing explained and thats gets old because its the usual formula; this doesnt follow normal formula. make the ending a little bit more subtle i think. Not the last line but the doctor-elongate the suspence of "what the flip is going on?" i enjoy...

I havent read any of the earlier chapters but I am definitely intrigued. Concise, strong language matches the subject. I am doing this as i go along btw Pabst-after the beer? either way i like the name. the first line needs to be broken apart or made less confusing. I am a bit of a grammer nazi forgive me but there's no need for the ' after russians in 2nd line. But by then–even if their intelligence was incorrect, even if the farmhouse did not house the partisans they sought–still it housed ...

Love "kaleidoscope of emotion" Good theme-embrace all of someone even the bad parts. the only criticism I have is that love/cores-of-people are not always wise. The love you are talking about is wise so i guess that makes my criticism kinda irrelevant. ebb and flow have been used alot in conjunction almost a cliche. I do like it though thanks for writing!

My word 50 to 100,000 cash monies? thats alot of dough! The Idea of the painting does seem brilliant and magnificent but i think its kinda cocky to say it so outright. 'June 2010 produce live webcam footage of "The Finale", where the painting's web page" sounds akward but can be easily fixed with adash or something. I would change the name of the painting too because its too obvious, like naming a dog with a black spot on his face spot. Anyway the actual painting sounds groundbreaking and i w...

i like the chaotic imagery you used in the beginning. You gotta respect people you meet in an ally. "the feeling was both old and new like creating a sense of dejavu wanting to wake me up from the slumber and experience something always to remember"-my favorite part because that feeling used to come over me all the time. The name is cool too

As far as imagery goes the first Stanza is Straight Gangsta. You could build the drum up a bit. 'Statued Stone' could be changed and i wouldnt be upset. Kinda redundant. I dont like kings so i m kinda biased against the whole piece as i think most kings' bodies would do the public more good if they threw their bodies to the dogs but i enjoyed the ride! "the people of the king wander, weary, lost, together"- i like that because it builds in a weird way, worried and confused about what to do bu...

Simple and concise. I was happily amused the whole way through. You gotta respect Decandence Road. Weak Ending- i think you should end with something more shocking or different than telling the reader that the ghost was dead, however. Im pretty sure abode is the correct spelling btw. "Nothing scary nor ghastly to be seen Like walking into a house on Halloween' eh sometimes theres ghastly stuff goin on in halloween

Wow you're only 16? i looked through several of ur poems and decided to review this one'although i also liked "people these days." Yeah i believe our world has probably been in the exact place we are at now countless times and just havent gotten it right yet, civilizations rising and falling and possibly destroying all life until we build back up through evolution. Who knows? I like the short poems because you can go two ways: get published in a collective artist poetry book or release a book...

Love the title and im all about looking glasses. never read through the looking glass except skimming through it once in another dimention. Brain probing-squirm! "Come probe my cranial lands of seclusion And paddle the muddy waters of my confusion"-Thats dirty!haha. ilove this poem "But not every ovule doth sprout Some are smothered by weeds of doubt" nice "To fill your speculative prescription Signed of course with my indecisive inscription"- i would change that second line because its reall...