Incredible! This is a magnificent piece and I love the way it transcends all barriers in order to reach all audiences! This written work seems to do so with splendid ease. Bravo! -Michael

I really like the story being told here through the poetry. I think you are a wonderful story teller! It would be pretty complicated for me to tell a story like this through these form of poetry and do it so well. Keep writing because you are very good!

Outstanding!!! I love the rhythm and meter of this poem! "Remember" is a written work with a thoughful and compelling message. One can read it without, periods, or other punctuations at the end of the stanzas and still know what the creator meant. Bravo!! Extremely well done! -Michael

This written work is splendidly crafted! I am immediately brought to a place of arsitocracy when I read. I wish there was more to completely fill my senses. I drank the, "velocious conviction filtered with ardor", and my eyes marveled at, "the chimera in my eyes seem to overshadow every conscious entity", and I know if I read further I would be able to hear and smell the world surrounding Lucinda Ann Faulkner's world. Bravo, extremely well done, this is a fantastic opening to a story and I wa...

Amen! And, I do enjoy this melting pot! -Michael

This poem throws imagery right into your face! It seems to me to be a metaphor for a young man who is trying to master life. The horse represents the turbulent life the young man has had and the young man is expressing his frustration having lived it. However, this poem could also mean something entirely different and I may have thoroughly missed the point. Regardless, I liked it... -Michael

It's a beautiful and thoughtful poem... You have my deepest sympathy for your loss. Truly, -Michael

I believe this is as good as it gets! I enjoy the first stanza & third stanza the most! However, since you are not interested in hearing suggestions about the rhyme-scheme in the second stanza I am forced to give this written work a "9" overall... The first stanza grabs you with a picturesque quality about it! The third stanza is a delightful finish! The second stanza made me envision a grueling march! Well Done! Bravo! -Michael

Hello, I believe you have certainly established the use of "Rhythm" and "Alliteration". It would be good if you could get to the point in fewer stanzas. In my amatuer opinion, use of the words "me" and "come" (including "overcomes") multiple times takes away from the impact the poem makes... I like this poem because it matches the similar rhythmic style I use in my poems. I also like the way you keep the word usage simple without going overly "high brow" when it isn't necessary. Overall, it i...

Whoa, That's pretty trippy and I love it! It is hard to capture those kind of feelings and moments with words and have the ability to convey them to an audience where everyone understands. You do this with wonderful ease! Well done! Bravo! -Michael