The concept is brilliant-Unreality. I think another verse touching on some of the things that draw our attention and lead us into our perceptions which only mirror reality would benefit the message of this one. last verse-remove the still from hoping its not too late-and the last cause-is spelled cuase-

It would be very interesting to hear what kind of music these lyrics belong to. You misspelled revelation and I think it may fit better if the next line said ...that love and lust actually must coincide. Overall the body fits the title. I don't get the part about riding a cyst but the visual of the action itself does stick. Keep up the writing.

my interpretation: each person is an individual cell and all together composing the population of humanity as a whole on Earth aka "a dysfunctional body" longing for homeostasis, aka, a harmonious equilibrium that is maintained by each of these individual cells working together as a complex biological system to offset disrupting changes. The quote is complex in it's simplicity and I'm sure has many meanings. Am I close?

100% accurate and beautifully stated. Simple, concise. Eloquent.

The message is beautiful and the end is especially inspiring. I really love : "If our road is ever bumpy; we will pull over analyze it with diplomacy, re-pave with understanding,*** seal it with cool communication, *** and drive on in soft laughter" You captured the healing process of a romantic relationship. I wonder if you've earned degrees in psychology. "Your way" is one of love and that is a wonderful thing. The reciever of your love as I am sure you feel you are, is blessed. Keep sharin...

The flow is lost in the helplessness... I understand how the pain flees once the blood flows and there is a thin dermal layer between deep and too deep. Unfortunately, many of us stifle the inner screams by piercing our own flesh...but I can tell you, 10 years your senior, those scars, if nothing else will serve as a reminder to you, the anguish you have overcome. Most likely, by the time you read this, the pain will already be out of your system. However, I want to remind you of those people...

I have to get my dictionary out to understand exactly what you are saying...I'd be interested to hear what kind of music you would sing, scream, shout or rap it to. My best guess would be hard alternative with a pulsing guitar. It is an interesting read but it seems as though you may be working too hard in the vocab department. Perhaps you are an honors english student but the standard comprehension is in my opinion a bit lower...(or maybe I just want to believe that since there were more tha...

I love that "hey mystery father, I'd like to date your daugther." It seems to end abruptly but maybe that's intentional given the content. I like the underlying theme take your chances as they present themelves less they be lost to us forever. Thinking of you and wanted to feel close so I got online to read your post...MUAH

Beautiful and sensual. Liquid harmony...the imagery alone is breath-taking. Haiku poems always 'used' to strike me as too short, a fan of lyrics myself, but this one says so much beyond what is written. Well done and thank you for sharing.