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Some nice minor chuckles in the first and second paragraphs - great start! I love the irony too! That's why i clicked the link 0.1 seconds flat when i saw your title - It's a great title! IN reference to Christians drawing from the old testament - I've heard it mentioned that these christians are not being christians but r being jewish, (nothing wrong with jews but i perhaps it's worth pointing out christians have got their religions wrong when following law) Overall this flows very very nice...

umm, that's deep and for me quite cryptic (I wish i was more insightful to the last paragraphs object of reference) Some of your descriptions are terrific (dissociative enchantment was my favourite) and as for favourite lines... the lat one of the second paragraph. Rhythmically i loved it. Had to read it 3 times because it was so think and rich (and I'm a little think myself). Some great writing. It would be a fantastic start to something bigger and epic

I didn't find this very convincing, although I don't doubt the success of the techniques being proposed. My first problem lay in the fact that it makes out that quickly seducing a woman into a temporary state of wanting you is the be all and end all of life. It's quite the opposite. I think you should remove the sentence about it being the best kept secret for that reason and also the fact that it is a very commonly known and very commonly sited technique in modern western society. You'd do b...