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AGE:
15
LOC: Wahiawa, HI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 21
LOC: Wahiawa, HI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 21
Hi everyone. My name is Jamie. I’m fairly young, but not new to writing. I’m a member of many online writing communities. I only write novels, mainly horror, but I also have two adventure and three romance in progress. If you get a chance, please check out my stories, I”m looking for constructive criticism. Thanks.
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Mark tried to scream, but as soon as he opened his mouth the icy cold water flooded in, and all the emerged was a strangled gurgling sound. He kicked and thrashed against the firm hands that held him down, but he was only six, no match for a strong adult. His struggles were becoming weaker. His head broke the surface but before he could take a breath he was forced under again. Through the haze of water Mark could dimly see the face of his mother, twisted into unimaginable hate, as she forced ...
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"Not now Spike, I'm on the phone." Olivia whispered to her 3-year-old bulldog, clamping her hand over the telephone mouthpiece. She firmly led Spike out of her room, slammed the door on the disappointed dog and removed her hand from the phone. "So anyways Savannah, of course I'd love to go grab a slice of pizza-" There was a pause while Savannah responded, then Olivia laughed dryly and said, "Yeah, cause you know how much I'd love seeing Shayne there," Shayne was her ex. "Okay, I'll meet you ...
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The Love Note A sharp cry of pain could barely be heard over the loud crack of gunshot. Like a scene from a movie, a young teenage boy clutched his bloodied chest and fell over backwards. As he hit the ground, a girl about the same age stepped from the shadows. She was clad in a black cat suit which made her blend into the night. Flashes of star shine glinted off the thick glasses she wore. She walked over and glanced down sadly at the lifeless body. “I’m sorry Joel,” she murmured. “But you r...
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"Not now Spike, I'm on the phone." Olivia whispered to her 3-year-old bulldog, clamping her hand over the telephone mouthpiece. She firmly led Spike out of her room, slammed the door on the disappointed dog and removed her hand from the phone. "So anyways Savannah, of course I'd love to go grab a slice of pizza-" There was a pause while Savannah responded, then Olivia laughed dryly and said, "Yeah, cause you know how much I'd love seeing Shayne there," Shayne was her ex. "Okay, I'll meet you ...
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I liked it, and you definitely should continue, you have a talent worth shaping and a good beginning. There were a few grammer misktakes, I tried to catch them all, they'll help if you rewrite this paragraph: between him lips - between his lips balls of her feat - balls of her feet "Happy New Year.” He says - "Happy New Year," he says
I liked the story, although personally I got a little confused towards the end when it was talking about the "flicker" and the little boy that looked like him and all that stuff. You have talent in writing though, that's for sure. I also like that you have a voice in your writing, and, coming from the country, reading a story with my accent is a nice change from the boring scripts some people have on here. I apologize for the rating in anthology, I don't know what it is, so I can't rightly gi...
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