When I started to read your piece I did wonder whether you were being pompous or arty, because the words you used to describe everyday items (eg 'appendages' and 'digits' for fingers) were too literary. BTW, I gave you a low score on the agent/publisher bit because I'm not an agent or publisher and I'm not sure what they'd be looking for. I did suspect your piece was about manicuring, but got confused halfway through and instead visualised something akin to the scene in 'the Matrix' where Neo...

Cor, are you trying to pick a fight with sixteen-year-old writers? Give the poor little dears a chance. Just because you're an oldie, it doesn't mean you can generalise them like that, does it? Instead of telling them that they suck, perhaps you could show them why you're better than them by writing some really good pieces that would knock the socks of their little feet. Peace.

Your story is one of the best I've seen on Urbis so far. There are, however, too many errors; to save you credits, I'll send you a message instead. Good luck!

This reminds me of those Christian poems like "Footprints in the Sand" and articles etc from religious publications because of the subject matter and because it's very old-fashioned - your spelling and grammar are perfect and your poem has stanzas and rhyming couplets. But the ending is really pessimistic for a poem with this format - I wonder if this poem is reflecting what you're genuinely feeling? Remember that every cloud has a silver lining. cheers!

Please note that I haven't read Chap 1. Chap 2 is effective in setting up the character of Rachel without the reader needing to refer back to Chap 1 - I think it's good to not refer back to previous chapters, otherwise the story becomes repetitive. Here you tell us a lot of info without actually putting Rachel in a situation which would show her character. For example, instead of using the line "she was a smart girl, certainly not stupid" perhaps you could describe a situation in which she sh...

Your first sentence was striking; I could see immediately that the style of your writing is very unique and interesting because it smacks of a 19th century novelist trying to write in a 21st century way. I like it loads! What happens next ;) ??? One typo: "lashed" should be "lashes". Cheers!

You have a nice writing style reminiscent of thriller writers eg Lee Childs and John Grisham; it's not like sci-fi at all because the sentences are short and sharp, yet packed with emotion. Grammar: I understand that it is not appropriate repeatedly use "has been" or "had been" eg "Emma’s husband had been bearing the brunt of her disappearance. Although there had been no body, nor any signs of foul play, his reputation had been slandered." could be rewritten as "Emma's husband bore the brunt ...

I love this! It's brilliant! I don't have anything bad to say about it because it's a proper limerick. However, I don't think 'mace' can have the indefinite article in front of it because like sand or sugar, it's uncountable. Perhaps 'plaice' or 'dace' would be better. Good job, though!

This in itself would be a short story; if taken together with the other parts, you've got a novella on your hands. There was too much talking and analysing, which did not drive the story forward, and not enough action. Also, there was a tad too much touchy-feely sentimental stuff in it - for me, it would have been better if there had been more action that was relevant to the narrative.