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The tree that should not exist in this world. The garden that was forbidden. That clear moon that should never appear. Beyond those things, among the concepts that exist outside of human understanding, somewhere in the darkness beyond heaven and earth, that final path can be seen yet not seen. While in her vision, it escapes her perception. Should she view it completely, the image would be enough to dissolve her individuality. Just as a man can’t perceive the earth, she cannot perceive ...
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Present day There is no excess of time this morning. The frigid January air carries the hum of rush-hour through the city as rubbernecks and police vehicles bring the flow of inner city traffic to a crawl. Like the frustrated populous that inches forward much more slowly than she can walk, Elise is also going to be late. Despite that, she’s taken a detour. At the center of this mess, at the very bottleneck of the flow of traffic is a water-main explosion. Or at least, that’s what ...
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They leave Nina’s unconscious body outside. And as soon as Jordan and Wendy pass through the narrow opening, the heavy door slides shut behind them with a reverberating bang. At the moment they’re greeted by a mocking, sarcastic tone. “Oh look, Silvia, it’s a dead person.” The interior of the factory is illuminated only by the moonbeams that stream in through the upper floor windows, casting the metal framework shadows on the bare floor. A thick lattice of cross...
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The intercom announces that the next stop is coming up as Jordan and Nina stand very close to one another, pressed together by the increasing crowd of the subway car. Jordan is between her and the rest of the occupants, holding both of their bags in his free hand, and trying desperately to make up for his behavior yesterday. After that blowup in the hallway, they’re both still a little raw around each other despite how much effort he’s putting into acting normally. That endeavor ...
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20 years ago For the first time in millennia, this place is completely silent. In a place that should be consumed in the hum of traffic, chatter of people, and the roar of jets overhead, for miles, not even a single bird call can be heard. It’s a silence so deep that, at first, he’d thought he’d gone deaf. The sky is grey, but he can tell that it’s day. The sun barely penetrates the thick, rolling clouds in golden beams across the flooded landscape. These aren’t ...
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"Axel barely knew what a Senator was"--Hah! That made me laugh. Also that's a good way of separating Axel and Calvin in terms of education and such. Looks like we're at the part just before the intro. This is an expected, but good turn of events. Now that they've all teamed up, I feel like the real story is starting up. You've got three distinct personalities already, and I like how Cavil is being all motivational and really growing out of his need to need people that his boyfriend complained...
You did a good job of making me hate Jake enough to laugh along with Axel after the murder. The scooby line made me chuckle, especially when it was used the second time as a dig by Jake When you mention that his mom got shot, and that Denise's baby was kidnapped, I like how you glossed over them quickly since it fits the setting, and the character's forced acceptance of many things that normal people would never even have to endure makes it seem like he's pretty jaded against these things, wh...
brothers--brothers' and it is still noon; but it feels has if the sun will never set--The "but" doesn't really fit, taking it out will make might work a bit better since. Sometimes I cannot believe my own brothers swung their swords at me.-- This line seems somewhat redundant, the sentence before expressed his disbelief already, so this might not be necessary. serve too masters--two barely mist--miss as I manages to--manage but Victor stop time--stops What does he mean father--comma before "f...
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