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AGE:
38
LOC: Downingtown, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 12
LOC: Downingtown, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 12
(Apologies all, but for now I am just pasting in the bio I have on my website, www.jennifermwilson.com, I will add a more personal touch during another of my twin toddler naptime breaks! peace – jw)
Jennifer M. Wilson holds a degree in Communications and Comparative Religion from Ithaca College, where she studied at both the New York and London campuses. Intent on building a foundation from which to write better works of fiction, she moved to Seattle during the grunge years and then Vashon Island where she chopped firewood, published ‘zines, sculpted clay and tested her own metal. After publishing several works in literary journals and making the decision to embark on a novel length work of fiction, she discovered Bridget Bishop wh…
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Addie hated death, at first. She leapt into it without much comprehension of the door she would shut. And once on the other side, she rued the day her teenaged self had swallowed all of those sleeping pills from her parent’s medicine cabinet. But, on a sunny morning in Atlanta, she discovered that she could follow electric currents through their wires, things began to look up. She was perched in a magnolia tree with her friend Bryce. They were watching children play at recess by the elementar...
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He is a man of science and believes that when we die we are worm food and nothing more. This thought depresses me, so I roll it around in my consciousness, feeling for the ridges on its surface, trying to worry it down. We have been together for two years; some days it feels like a lifetime, and some days it feels as if we're strangers haggling for space on a bench. One evening, in a deliciously drunken moment, the sort that makes it feel like a lifetime, we decided that we would take one maj...
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Amusing quote, I like it, however, you should stress a little bit more about punctuation!
I like the celestial aspect of the erotica, it is unusual and even skirts a certain taboo that I find amusing. But you coudl certainly use some more plot to this trist. I would add a bit more action, wandering, background on either of them before the scenes really take off into erotic territories. You have a few spelling errors and some repeated words (a pet peeve of mine), maybe reda through and try not to say the same thing twice when describing the actions... look for a few new metaphors a...
I like the concept here, but it needs some rewriting to tighten it into a real piece of art. In the first paragraph - I'd avoid flashback. Actually I'd like it if the action were in the present tense until at least the third paragraph - just to suck the reader in properly - draw out the subtle details without giving away the true cause. Your unravelling of the truth of what happened is nice. As a whole, I think it's worth detail attention and perhaps some lengthening into a full short story.
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Overall, I really liked this. There is a feeling that carries through and you paint a portrait of this character that is distinguishable and interesting. You acknowledged grammatical and spelling flaws so I won't go there. Some suggestions and some praise: The opening paragraph is a little confusing - I would suggest reworking it as it could turn a reader away. That last line "is a loathsome creature that eludes me" holds a lot of self pity within it and may create the feeling that the narrat...
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