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When I took a little pencil When I took a little board My mom used to say to me "That's not for boys !" Then I took one of her dresses Then I took two of her shoes And she shouted me "Hey ! That's not for boys !" Oh ! Why 'not for boys" ? What is 'for boys' ? What if I don't wanna be a boy anymore ? Now I steal her fake eyelashes and all her gloves and the bright sunglasses I put on my aquiline nose But oh ! She doesn't cry to me anymore 'cause well, she lives in a home... The year she passe...

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Slashed wrists in a hot tub Mermaids, it won't take long ! My beauty sleep dishevelled Stolen hairs rubbed by old dirt fingernails I stare at the fade-lighted ceiling Surrounding arms around me Numb, her dyed webs evade Abroad, casting silly spells in vain You used to say it would be easy for me to go away but it's not... You used to say it would be easy for me to go away but it's not... that easy for me to go away I won't give you my life away so easily but I have to say that I will one of ...

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by manic_mind

I like the way it ends and the whole story in general. i may just add that well, i don't know if you're a guy or a girl, but i've thought throughout my reading of your piece that the narrator, the woman, doesn't express herself like one, i mean the way she talks, what she says, that's not quite fitting actually, it's not that she speaks or behaves like a man but i guess it lacks of femininity. the character is not entirely characterised to my opinion. hope i helped u tjk

by A_Silly_Lady_Novelist

hi, well at least that's quite clear and concise, it reminds of me of one i read before which turned the imlage on its opposite, "the blade turned into a pen". That's kind of epic too, the way the pen tends to give its salt to your life, the ways it gives it sense, hope you won't ever run out ink because that would probably put an end to your life... tjk

by 76_Rhoades

i very like this one, that could have been said in pulp fiction ! it really interrogates people on what brought that situation, who are at leat the three people involved and what happened between them. really great. tjk

by Kanday

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