Great drabble! I see why you put it under horror, but it wasn't that horrific to me. But it was interesting and a good story. There was only one sentence that seemed off as far as grammar: "It calm him down… sorted things out his chaotic mind." It seems like this should actually read: "It calmed him down...sorted things out in his chaotic mind." Overall, it was well written and made me want to read more. Thanks for sharing!

This is a good piece...your typical tale of romantic woe. It reads more like a journal entry, so I was wondering if it wouldn't be more appropriate in that category. Also, I really enjoyed reading this until I got to the part about the car sounds. At that point it seemed to stray from "romance" and go a little too "car talk". It made me think of a mechanic shop, after which you abruptly start talking about crying over this guy again. Other than that, I say this is a good piece that could use ...

Awesome story! I was a little confused at first, what with the whole jumping between two sides of the story, but I figured it out pretty quickly. I was a little upset when I got to the end though, because I had so many unanswered questions. I'm assuming this is the beginning of a longer story (at least I hope it is) so I won't harp on that too much. :) I would like to know who this crazy amulet guy is though. Anyway, the story did grab me, and by the end I was hooked. There were only a few th...

I think I understand the point you are trying to make, but I don't understand the comparison between sarcasm and Americans, because Americans can't BE wit. It would have made more sense to me if it said something more along the lines of "Sarcasm isn't the lowest form of wit; American genius is." Hope that helps, and thanks for sharing!

Nice...I could see this being done at a spoken word reading or something. Or maybe as an indie song. It was creative, but a little hard to follow for me personally. Also, I thought it would have been better if it had ended with "that made it okay for you to love me." The two lines beyond that make it feel unfinished. Thanks for sharing!

I understand what you're saying here, but I felt more depressed when I finished reading this than humored. Sorry if I missed it. Maybe this would be better under "Quotes"? Thanks for sharing!

I loved this piece. It really expressed to me a sense of freeness and eagerness. I don't think it matters what made you write this, because I feel the piece made it obvious what your feelings were. Plus, it may help other people apply it more personally if they don't know the background behind why you wrote it (if that makes sense). Thanks for sharing!

I really understood this piece...but that's where I think it goes wrong really. In a way, I feel that a memoir should really be more personal and this could be applied to so many people. Though I suppose if you were trying to write something that a lot of people could relate to, then this is great. Hope that makes sense, and thanks for sharing!!

This piece has potential, but was hard for me to follow for various reasons. First, the author's notes say that this will be in journal form, but the first sentence does not read the way a person would actually write in their journal. It's definitely the beginning of a good story though, and I thought the rest of the piece worked great as a journal entry. Also, there were a few sentences that didn't read right: 1)"Why does any one person still assume that there is still innocence in this worl...

Great poem! The imagery was fantastic and really helped me feel like it was me speaking the words. I think people will be able to easily relate to what you are expressing here. What I really liked about this piece was the feeling of desperation throughout the verses, with the exception of the last verse, which really put the final touch on the poem with a feeling of defeat and a little bit of acceptance that this new person will never be able to replace the one you long for. My only complaint...