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AGE: 16
LOC: Modesto, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 28

Well, I’ve been on Urbis since it was first getting started, and seen it grow so much! In fact, my best friend’s uncle made this site, and I’ve loved it since the beginning.
I’m definitely an artistic person, in many ways. I love drawing, painting, photography, and of course, writing.
I think that it would be amazing to publish one of my “works” someday. I should warn you, I can be vague in my writing, so use your imagination. I’m open to any criticism, and also any compliments ;).

Enjoy!

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Humor/Satire / Watch out...
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6 Reviews   0 Comments
Life always sneaks up on us.
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Humor/Satire / Careful, now...
Version 1
7 Reviews   3 Comments
Obituary: died from explosion of creativity.
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Stuck
Version 1
8 Reviews   3 Comments
Have you ever loved someone so much that it hurt? It's the kind of love that makes you feel nauseous, all the time, especially when you realize you've been thinking about that person for over an hour. Then when you're around that person, you always manage to be nonchalant about everything: No, I don't care if you want me to stay. Do you want me to stay? No, I don't mind running extra errands with you. Do you mind? Sure, it's fine if we go bungee jumping off a cliff. I've got nothing better t...
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Quotes / Circles
Version 1
19 Reviews   6 Comments
Inspiration, action, addiction; lather, rinse, repeat.
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Poetry / Patience
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9 Reviews   2 Comments
What was it like to have to fight such a powerful disease? To be on the brink, to swim or to sink, to feel one final breeze. Kept alive by machines, you know what it means to have to stand on the edge. Whether or not you wanted that spot, you were forced onto a ledge. I can surely relate to that dreadful fate, but you were taken away. So now here I suffer, pushed to be tougher, and all I can do is pray. You see me still here, shaking in fear; you know I can't do this alone. Could you do me a ...
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Short Story / Daisy
This was an interesting story. It held my attention, but I have to say that I was a bit unsatisfied at the end - there were so many questions asked and no answers. Of course, it does leave a lot to the reader's imagination, and it leaves lots of room open for a "part 2" or even to just expand on this story. There were a couple typos (ex: "Her _expression"; "lady’s _expression"), which is no big deal. To me, it was kind of strange how the story started out very innocent, but by the end it beca...
Quotes / Plugging away
I absolutely love the irony. I'm sure many others, as well as myself, can read this and say, "me too". It really captures a hard truth, which is that so many people have so much talent, but not enough of them get to be seen. It's definitely one of the more clever six-word memoirs I've read. Great job!
Short Story / The dirt that follows
This gave me the chills, for a couple reasons. The obvious reason being the fact that it appears that the character has been buried alive, but also because it's very good. You have some great thoughts in here, such as the part about living forever or becoming nothing. As for mistakes, there were a couple of times where there were no periods, and once where there was two. Also, "than" needs to be "then" in the case of: "And than A shovel full of dirt falls", and the very last sentence (which, ...
Non-fiction / Honesty
This is very beautiful. It really shows the passion that people have for writing, and how honest writers have to be sometimes. It also paints wonderful imagery in the reader's mind. Bravo!
Sci Fi & Fantasy / There’s Life Up There
I definitely think you should continue with this. Even in this short start, you were able to capture my attention. Unfortunately, it felt like there wasn't enough info. There could be at least one paragraph between each of the ones you have here. For example, between the first and second, you could talk about why they were out running in the first place. Between the second and third, you could describe how Marion feels about his brother's sudden disappearance. In the third paragraph, you coul...