This is one of the best of the 6-word memoirs I've read, maybe the best. I love what it's saying, or at least what I'm getting from it, which is that writers, as well as artists, have the hard task of making the invisible visible by expressing through words or pictures little pieces of our minds. And yes, it does take lots of practice, as you said. Great work!

I definitely think you should continue with this. Even in this short start, you were able to capture my attention. Unfortunately, it felt like there wasn't enough info. There could be at least one paragraph between each of the ones you have here. For example, between the first and second, you could talk about why they were out running in the first place. Between the second and third, you could describe how Marion feels about his brother's sudden disappearance. In the third paragraph, you coul...

This is very beautiful. It really shows the passion that people have for writing, and how honest writers have to be sometimes. It also paints wonderful imagery in the reader's mind. Bravo!

This gave me the chills, for a couple reasons. The obvious reason being the fact that it appears that the character has been buried alive, but also because it's very good. You have some great thoughts in here, such as the part about living forever or becoming nothing. As for mistakes, there were a couple of times where there were no periods, and once where there was two. Also, "than" needs to be "then" in the case of: "And than A shovel full of dirt falls", and the very last sentence (which, ...

I absolutely love the irony. I'm sure many others, as well as myself, can read this and say, "me too". It really captures a hard truth, which is that so many people have so much talent, but not enough of them get to be seen. It's definitely one of the more clever six-word memoirs I've read. Great job!

This was an interesting story. It held my attention, but I have to say that I was a bit unsatisfied at the end - there were so many questions asked and no answers. Of course, it does leave a lot to the reader's imagination, and it leaves lots of room open for a "part 2" or even to just expand on this story. There were a couple typos (ex: "Her _expression"; "lady’s _expression"), which is no big deal. To me, it was kind of strange how the story started out very innocent, but by the end it beca...

Wow, this really is very intriguing to me. It definitely caught (and kept) my attention the whole way through. It's amazing how many different ways you can show that you love someone. This has beautiful, beautiful imagery, I love it. You had a constant rhyme theme, which is always nice. All I can suggest is to break it up a bit - it's a lot to swallow when it's one big paragraph. Great, great work. Thank you for sharing it with me.

I especially liked the last stanza - the final line caught me off-guard, in the good way. =] This was pretty short, for my taste, but still very good. It seems that you started with a rhyme scheme, but by the second stanza it was gone. If you try to make the whole thing have a rhyme scheme, be careful that you don't make it rhyme too hard, if you know what I mean. I like the questions in this piece; it makes the reader think and wonder the same things. Overall, I think it's good - the rhyming...

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. You have the most amazing metaphors and imagery, it truly is amazing. This is also very sweet, and I love how it tells a story through emotions, rather than just stating a bunch of feelings - it makes it interesting. I also love the word "foreverness." The only thing I can suggest is to put it into stanzas; however, I do like the kind of rushy feeling to it, considering this piece is very intense. Also, you could put in periods to let readers know where one th...

I love your alliterations and word play ("pours" and "pores") - very clever! You've really got the feeling of love down - the goods and bads. The last stanza I especially liked because honestly the last line threw me off and surprised me (in the good way). The whole thing kept my attention, and my only disappointment was that it wasn't long enough. Great work!