I have read "Dragon" and although the beginning line of "Once upon a time" was sort of an old one-liner and left me thinking we go again, it was good. There is good detailing on the what the dragon looked like "his scale as green as grass and his tail as long as river. It gave a good visual of him. The description of what he was doing to the Earth was also descriptive. There the only part I noticed was a mix of the American language with old English of using "lest' and "woe betide". They work...

It has left me sorta wondering how did it start and what point did she decide she had to kill her husband. The detail of Kells tapestry and reference to the 15th century harp has left me with an empty void. Not really sure where this story is starting or going. More might work to give it direction to the character but listed as a romance has me doubting it at the moment. A few more paragraphs might tell the tale a bit more to make it interesting and wanting to read more. So my suggestion is a...

:chuckles: I like the way the words roll off your tongue when you say the poem out loud. It has a beat and a rhythm to it and when you get to the end and the keyword to make the poem finished was "that guy called superman". I really liked it. Keep writing.

True when you look at it from the gravity's point of view. :LOL: not bad not bad

I am happy you put the comment that you are only 14 yrs old and that said a lot about this romantic story. I would say it has a potential of being a good short story. I can see where you are trying to go with it. Mary is trying to find out about kisses and how each one means a different thing. It tells me she is also trying to find that special kiss that means "forever". Keep tweaking it, it does need some rewriting but don't loose the concept. In fact read it out loud and you can readily ide...

Hmmm..sorta lost me with the lengthy words that will need a dictionary to decifer and then to put the "true" word in place of, to make more sense to the average joe. You did jump right into the action part of the writing, loosing some sense of what the heck just happened. I find that I have to read it more than once to get a full feeling of what you are writing. But keep trying, Rome wasn't built in a day.

It made me visualize the butterfly with all the questions that float through my childhood memories. I really enjoyed it...light hearted and made me smile.

It was great. The matching of the alphabet with the people in the story added to the A-Z story book. It would and will be great with artwork to match.Definetly a book I would buy for a 3-4th grade reader.