LadyMactans's profile

LadyMactans avatar
AGE: 21
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 20

easily amused. often annoyed.
Argentine ant mind. I’m taking over the world.

(through entomology and writing, naturally)

Item Stats
Reviewer Stats
Items
Version 2
1 Review   0 Comments
Lecturer— polite, speaker at the podium, sets microphones in stands for a questioning opposition— “willing to listen.” Our mistake was assuming lips, alone, can lie— when it’s the ears that do the worst of it almost every time.
Ratings & Rankings
Poetry / Skinhead
Version 1
30 Reviews   40 Comments
Chelsea said, “He’s a SHARP dresser.” A real boot-boy, that one— straight-laced in leather— with a ‘byrd at his side, and a friend to his right. He’s drunk again. Whiskey-fucked, braces up— feeling good—not looking for a fight tonight. Well, boneheads never listen and a culture needs defending so down they go, now— head to toe—steel to bone: Chelsea said, “It’s a point of pride.” He gets it, that one— real pride is non-racist, non-extremist, non-political, non-ridiculous. A working class kid—...
Ratings & Rankings
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Cover Letter for MOS Summer Internship
Version 1
10 Reviews   5 Comments
Dear (unknown) I am interested in applying for the Summer Butterfly Garden internship at the Museum of Science Park in Boston. Information on the position was forwarded to me, as advertised on the Museum of Science website, by a friend. I believe I have a level of skill and interest fitting for a position like this. I am currently majoring in Natural Resource Studies with a minor in entomology at the University of Massachusetts at Amherst and have taken several relevant college-level courses ...
Ratings & Rankings
Version 1
20 Reviews   8 Comments
Lecturer— Polite, podium Speaker sets Microphones in Stands for a questioning Opposition—“willing To listen.” Our mistake Was assuming Lips, alone, can lie— When it’s the ears That do the worst of it Almost every time.
Ratings & Rankings
Poetry / Toy Bitches
Version 2
16 Reviews   16 Comments
She recalls— A certain breed of female maintained, almost entirely, within a certain class of people. Born into a promotion of weakness— walking magazine ads for the upper-middle class— advocates for ultimate dependence. She hates them. How easily they soak up their petty little lessons. Reflections of statements made (in classes, at parties, in passing) by these foolish, dolled-up dames: “My husband will do this. Why should I learn it?” “This is my passion. I want a Masters, at least, but I’...
Ratings & Rankings
Reviews
Limericks / MONEY WELL SPENT
Locked
Poetry / Half
Haha! Nice. Definitely an original subject matter. There are some issues with punctuation, especially in the second stanza. It was awkward to read and I wasn't sure exactly where the pauses were until I read it a couple times. The wording of line 5 on its own is awkward in itself, too. I'm not sure how I feel about the Exxon graph part, it seems to be addressing something completely unrelated-I realize it's a metaphor but it still seems unnecessary, I may suggest something more simple. I love...
Poetry / America,
This is very long. There is very little evident structure or form and even as free-verse it reads very much like awkward prose. You address some important issues but you address too many in one piece and much of it comes across as rambling. The constant repetition of "America" is tiresome, though it is really the only thing that makes this sound like some style of poetry. There are some places where you seem to adopt a sort of temporary form, but there doesn't seem to be much of a pattern at ...
Specific: -"Schools aren’t doing nearly enough about the problems of sexual harassment in their schools." It's repetitive to say "schools" twice. You can end it after "harassment." -"Sexual harassment demeans a student on the basis of his/her gender." This is inconsistent with what you said earlier about sexual harassment not being limited to any one group. That is, what you said earlier suggests that people might harass others of their same gender or sex or orientation, of a different gender...