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AGE: 42
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 13

A college instructor by day, poet by night, a recent arrival to Northern Alberta, Canada with my partner & bevy of pets. I have a love of all literature, but especially the Beats and philosophic meanderings that bend the mind.  Like Robert Frost said, “Anything more than the truth would be too much.”

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gods frozen untouched drink in the Pacific, their Giant feet and faces trace a serpentine rhythm, between an eternal shrug of their shoulders.   Beards race down to the water's edge, Fir coverings green with empathy barely stir as the ferry passes by, but chuckles at the small creaturs on the bow.     A peace beyond the wake into sun-touched places with beards of mist stirs from the earth's core made familiar by a stirring in mine.     &n...
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Global rules on women wrests two bodies from one soul - One needs the other to be whole. Fallacy’s females saved in the serving. Indoctrinated domination works top down - systemic dissection: Face, lips vocal chords breasts, hips. Appropriation disfigures the trophy womb. Patriarchy parrots perfect irony - negate subordinate’s Subjugation reflecting its own creation: The duty of illusion.
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Poetry / Significance
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somewhere inside inconsequential exists outside linear appears and falls between my toes Reaching down to pick it up I sit in the corner with the puzzle book and try to fit it all together
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Poetry / Orange Deja Vu
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slumbers of the landscape soften cement with sensual embraces of drifting curves and overcoats of white protend pristine nips of cold tha penetrate my skin wrap of a memory warm to me with love and family and Christmas glow to me as i get into my warm car to my warm house with warm eyes to greet me in the orange light illuminates a deja vu of sleigh rides and chestnuts old fashioned pictures inspire blazing fires with fur mufflers and lace after lace of skates greeting card images inbetween t...
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Poetry / Flashback
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she felt this surge of love some groovy-cool-cat need for touch towards the stranger beside her in some hippie-pot-smoking-LSD-tripping-flower-power kind of embrace where you hold hands with strange men who have no baggage ticket attached felt strobe-like flashes project her head on his chest in some lost deja-voodoo-Jo-Jo’s-psychic-hotline memory of some transcendent-levitating-guru-praising astral projection for having glimpsed humanity behind the counter while anyone else holds your luggage
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Poetry / Fearless
The combination of the metaphorical introduction "we were warned about the river," with the exuberance of youth integrated into the rest of the piece extremely well. It all connects very effectively in the ending stanza - and makes the literal and figurative message hit home. It immediately made me go back to the beginning and read it from the perspective of the abstract reference (at least, in how I interpreted it). Only suggestion is to watch your tenses, ie: I would change the following: c...
This is a great piece! I'm a fan of Scott Peck's and a friend of Bill W.'s, so really appreciate the content. On another note, one of the paragraphs isn't like the others. The 2nd paragraph into the 3rd paragraph on grief is a bit of a leap, for there is no transition to it. I understand how it applies to the road less travelled and pain, but many readers might jump to the conclusion you're talking about dealing with death. A bit of an explanation about how grief is a thread that runs through...
Poetry / How to cope
Powerful, emotional material - it's an issue that many can relate, but few can formulate words around. It's a crying out that feels like a journal entry, where some poetic devices could be utilized to create more impact. Focus on the emotion. I hear the confusion through the repeated questions, but what's missing, I think, is the anger, fear, pain. Try some repetition to get a flow going, to emulate the idea of looking for answers. The last line is a little disjointed, and takes away from the...
I really like this. You use wonderful imagery - whisper honeyed stories - sliding like a plate through his fingers - beautiful! The tone is fantastic, and you weave an interesting story. A couple editing suggestions: You might want to take out "work" and just put in "an acquaintance" - the rhythm of this line feels out of kilter for me. I feel there is a line missing after "She talks to him while she undresses." It feels like too much of a jump to: "She is a dancer to the beats of her own spe...
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I really like this! It has a great narrative, and the rhythm is fantastic! You use a lot of interesting vocabulary to make the lyrics fresh and illicit emotion. The only edit I'd suggest is: "my new set of rules will shape me to be all that I can be" seems a little awkward - too many beats, compared to the rest of the lines. Maybe: "shape me to be what I can be"? Nice job!
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