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Disillusioned. Probably the best word you could sum up my existence with. I seem to wade through the tides of life with contrasting hope and fear, guilt and satisfaction, love and lust, loss and gain. I am a post-modernist poet, perhaps a prophet that foresees my own downfall. Like a painter pinning details on every inch of his canvas, I could continue pinning up labels and terms from which you could resurrect my image—crucified with pen and ink. Yet I prefer to have you piece together who I am from my own feeble work. Gain an idea of who I am from my raw perspectives. While the image may be distorted at best, at least you have something you can touch and feel. You have substance that is characterized by emotions no one can ever paint w…
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The Harmonica That Follows This Symphony Orchestra: A Critical Analysis of Inherit the Wind
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Of the many legal battles of the 20th century, few have caused as intense of a controversy as the Scopes “Monkey” Trial. Placing Christian tradition against scientific theory, the trial deals with a young teacher who breaks a law by introducing the principles of Darwinism to his students. Inherit the Wind, by Jerome Lawrence and Robert E. Lee, takes this controversy and weaves it into a stunningly provocative play. Uncomfortably matching the precepts of evolution against the ideas of Creatio...
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12 Reviews
4 Comments
I stared at the chain around her neck Her lustrous, her flowing hair Framed the eyes encased in tears That washed mascara as a mop Her cheeks, smeared and blotched Like dirt in a goblet, foreign still As rapture to a loved one’s funeral Or even God to a western church Was her rabid anger to that coffin To drive her pretty head insane The pulpit, with a rose, swore and cursed March found three from a dozen trashed Brother is shivering, Sister’s in thirst But it never haunted her head that way ...
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5 Comments
The shadows hid them as a cupboard Their sneers, tattered jackets tucked away Near the lamp, I heard the hushed whispers The splattered blood, screams from their prey A javelin separated mothers from children Fathers called their wives on cell phones As the empty beds, dirty kitchens left a tear Fast asleep to TV light, a bullet left alone The radio wakes one lonely soul from sleep December’s cold cuts through his sheets With a night robe on, he gropes for his keys Staggering for the door he ...
Version 1
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4 Comments
I stared down a poorly dressed traveler A crucifix dangled from his rugged neck He plucked a dead petal from the roses That passed away a few weeks before He mumbled a few words about heaven And about this Earth, what’s it good for?
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She lived a long life Of baggage and regret I never knew ‘till they Tore her from it As the winds tears Colored leaves from The crooked branch She sits--embodied in This grave, this coffin Like a blister on a hand Or a feather on the floor I never surrendered to The tides and the winds And the forces of regret Tormented, Lynched, Scorched and entrenched She slept in a bed Of empathetic remorse I never knew her ’til I Pulled the covers down And the wind comes Picking, clawing, struggling A con...
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I like the solemn use of subtle rhymes seen throughout. Really, I was expecting something really sappy... but this really hit me with the a certain mournful depth. This is unique and really emotive. The personality and the wording is quite nice. While a few spots the lines seem to run on, this really comes across as emotional and works for the piece and not against it. I would really like to quote specific things that could be improved, but to be honest, this shouldn't be too refined. I can't...
LEt me just say this has a really nice rhythm and flow to it. To me it felt a lot like a nu-metal/rap-rock sort of thing like, as you had mentioned, Linkin Park or even earlier POD. While that sort of music never really gets on my good side, I think this works nicely. As far as the wording, a few things might twist my tounge, but you have it worked out pretty nicely and I think it mainly depends on how you perform the vocals. You've taken a topic and really carried it the whole way through wi...
Unlike many lyrics, this could actually work as written verse. The sentiment is quite strong and the continued repetition of "I will be strong" works as a nice verbal catch. The form and flow from different stages in life also works nicely. While I'm sure we've seen quite a few songs that hold such sentiment towards daughtors, you have done this head and shoulders above the rest. Never does this come across as cliched or overdone. So nice work. While not innovative, it really is a nice little...
THis would work quite well if you would reformat it as a lyric or as a poem. It has a certain catchiness to it and it seems to be somewhat relateable. Where I question it is when you put it as a quote. Yes, it can work as one and I think in certain instances, a very strong quote. Perhaps more in literary terms I could see this being more fascinating, but as a mass-appreciated quote... it isn't punchy enough. It's subtle, but it doesn't really that clear. In my opinion, I find it quite fascina...
There's really nothing overly special about this, but you make it work. While a few times it seems like you rhyme for the sake of rhyming (rough/gruff), most of the times it comes across naturally. You have a nice, natural flow that seems to be easily placed with a melody. While this has been a topic done before, I think you've done a decent job with it.
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