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AGE: 19
LOC: Frostburg, MD
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 12

Disillusioned. Probably the best word you could sum up my existence with. I seem to wade through the tides of life with contrasting hope and fear, guilt and satisfaction, love and lust, loss and gain. I am a post-modernist poet, perhaps a prophet that foresees my own downfall. Like a painter pinning details on every inch of his canvas, I could continue pinning up labels and terms from which you could resurrect my image—crucified with pen and ink. Yet I prefer to have you piece together who I am from my own feeble work. Gain an idea of who I am from my raw perspectives. While the image may be distorted at best, at least you have something you can touch and feel. You have substance that is characterized by emotions no one can ever paint w…

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Flash Fiction / She Wouldn't Let Go
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23 Reviews   3 Comments
  Her eyes. They sporadically shifted focus from face to face, as if glancing at those who had also been left behind. She stood hunched over as if a great weight was pressing against her back. And as she looked from face to face, she slowly made her way to the back of the room. A great room, it was. A room of about a thousand rugs and tapestries and a few certain wall hangings. All imported with prices that kept them from being relocated. It seemed more like a museum of ancient artifact...
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Lyrics / Origami
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6 Reviews   0 Comments
This is where the umbrellas parade And filter rain on churning sulfur seas Dangling from the night and softly swaying Hung from the heights with telephone cables This is where her feet brush the  waves The origami forms of the fishes in the depth Flee with fear from her shimmering shadow In contrast to negative spaces in her eyes She traces the forms She traces the lines She traces her fingers The origami seas swallow deep And her shadow disappears This is where the lines of the oc...
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4 Reviews   1 Comment
Gina, where has your daddy been? He washed in the sea and washed ashore His hair tangled and stringy with salt Gina, your toes sunk through the sand And you scurried to the sulk of a man Combing his sideburns, luring out twine The seaweed on his shoes and the fishing line And your salty tears met his tired, old eyes As deep and as dark as a shot of expresso With the lacy hem of your evening dress You wiped the sand from his cheeks and For a moment gazed into his sapphire pendent Oh Gina, he's...
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5 Reviews   3 Comments
You've laid to rest your eldest son The colors hide him as autumn comes A loss of sorts, quite lowered down Into the depths of infertile ground And dust and dirt and ash alone Can't keep his ghost away, away Suit coats and scarves gravely parade The angel of death pilots this motorcade And the calendar says it's three days now As the flesh rots off his pretty little skull The box, somewhere, seven feet below Can't keep his ghost away, away Orange and lemon leaves quietly descend As your feat ...
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12 Reviews   10 Comments
A thousand deep eyes... The oceans swarm as fingers And they're reaching for you The cold grasp of Father Time As he pulls at the scarf Woven tightly 'round your neck Pulling you deep... Pulling you deep... under. The serpent's tinted wings And the forbidden tree Adam said to Eve, “Take my rib—do with it as you please.” A thousand deep eyes A thousand cold hands Of Father Time The clock on your wrist Is stealing away the night Draining you of sleep Like coffee... Yet morning...
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Poetry / Be forewarned
This reminds me of a riddle. Each line seems to be a puzzle piece when, once the meaning is discovered, it leads to a greater understanding of the whole picture. I like that. However, that does lead to the lines having an especially disjointed feel. From a reader's perspective, I am initially confused because there seems to be no cohesive thread holding the piece together. Especially the line, "We never have to scream in bitter sleep." From a writer's perspective, this is enchanting. It seems...
The first thing I wish to point out is that you have a fine grip on words. You know how to use words and easily set them to a rhythm that works with music. This has a mainstream, radio ready format--and, while I don't really think that lends to lyrical brilliance, it shows you have a strong ability to accomplish what you set out to do. It is this point I don't understand-what have you set out to do? Evasiveness is not bad, but the lyrical content here seems to be a mess of disjointed phrases....
Poetry / Neda
I am simply going to speak of the piece, not the background from which it comes. As a reader, the impresserion is found that a great loss has occured. The words seem numbed, and not able to tell the story. Therefore 40 words that speak of pain from the perspective of one close to the victim. Nicely accomplished. I like how the there's a pause indicated by two lines between the name "Neda" and the next stanza. It gives a verbal sense of fear and silence and the inability to speak. With that in...
Poetry / The Shirt
The imagery is really nice, and I think the description/wordplay is near perfect. I love how it comes to a subtle, soft ending (in slumber, forgetting). It is very effective. I might, on the third line put commas between the words... it would add emphasis to the imagery. I like the longing in the piece and the bittersweet sense of romantic satisfaction. This is not fluff, but honest, gut-wrenching, mature writing. I think the "memory" word might not be the best... but that is simply from lite...
Lyrics / Glass Room
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Poetry / He Knows
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