Little_Cricket's profile
AGE:
20
LOC: Canutillo, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 09
LOC: Canutillo, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 09
I am a watcher and for the most part I’m pretty good at what I do – I understand most anyone in any situation because I can crawl inside their brain and see things as they see them. My favorite genre character is wronged/crazed/problem ridden women who might do bad things but are generally good at heart.
I write, but I’m rusty. I draw, but I lack my pens. Drama distracts me from my work but I’m clawing my way back.
On a personal level I’m very open minded, very sarcastic and awkward funny, and generally I love books like I love my family. Muah haha.
Find me elsewhere @
http://lovaofallvincents.deviantart.com/
http://myspace.com/thecricketlovesyou
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***READ THE AUTHOR'S NOTE FIRST TO UNDERSTAND FULLY*** Elle of course, was the one to get them in. Doc always marveled at the power the nurse had even over the seemingly more powerful. Not explaining, she simply came to his office and motioned him to follow. He didn’t ask questions because he knew she wouldn’t answer. Doc just trusted she would give them as much time as can be had and as much protection from Howard knowing about it as possible. The strong, stout little woman he had come to tr...
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“Aliana, why are you doing this to me?” My mother always asked the same question, revised in some grammatical way, as to why I was trying to destroy her. Perhaps this was why I’ve had very few friends in my life, and most of them were not human. My very first friend, I remember, was a baby bird, not much bigger than my child-sized palm. I was hiding from Tess, who had been ranting about germs in the kitchen and was scrubbing every inch with several new sponges and bleach. When she got her han...
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“Aliana, why are you doing this to me?” My mother always asked the same question, revised in some grammatical way, as to why I was trying to destroy her. Perhaps this was why I’ve had very few friends in my life, and most of them were not human. My very first friend, I remember, was a baby bird, not much bigger than my child-sized palm. I was hiding from Tess, who had been ranting about germs in the kitchen and was scrubbing every inch with several new sponges and bleach. When she got her han...
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Force me, Torch me, Kill me, Kiss me Over and Over and Over again Drown me, Burn me, Cut me, Hurt me Over and Over and Over again I’m a sadist I’m a masochist I’m a lover I’m a hater I’m a sinner I’m so holy Do you want me now? Taste me, Slap me, Fuck me, Please Just Love me Over and Over and Over Again I’m a model I’m a rock star I’m your girlfriend I’m your one night stand I’m anyone Know why? Know why? It’s because I love you It’s because I’m your whore.
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“Aliana, why are you doing this to me?” My mother always asked the same question, revised in some grammatical way, as to why I was trying to destroy her. I’ve had very few friends in my life, and even less than that have been human. My very first friend, I remember, was a baby bird, not much bigger than my child-sized palm. I was hiding from Tess, who had been ranting about germs in the kitchen and was scrubbing every inch with several sponges and bleach. When she got her hands on bleach, I l...
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Oooh i almost cried...I knew this was going to have a sad ass ending...the only thing I would suggest would be that since she's telling the story, you might want to make it seem more personal, like not so many details or replacing words like 'sobbed'...stuff like that is encouraged normally in writing but in character points only the most stuffy/traditional characters are that well versed. All in all this is an AWESOME story, it lures you in and you dont quite expect what's going to happen wh...
Very inquizitive - but long for a quote. I would file this under 'timely musings'....
I love this it brings you into the story so beautifully, it really catches the attention - Only a few things. Grammatical errors that irk me. "..allowing the steam blanket warm (to) her porcelain skin." "So she couldn’t understand as to why meeting Gabriel..." in stead of "all this had changed." i would recommend it to be (changed all that). And finally... " So why had she got the urge of potentiality?" The last word irks me for some reason - possible options are 'potentialbility' or 'urge of...
Its a sweet little story reflecting LIFE as it is and not as how the person wants it to be. Short, sweet, easy to get and simple to put yourself INTO the character, I thought it was good if not my cup of tea. The only change I would credit myself to suggest is that you put more...conflict. More inspiration or some concise ideal truth other than the vague one. Like I said - its okay for grammer and structure and everything but the "story" needs a little something more.
My goodness. This is a very, very good short story. Truly excellant. The structure is good, the concept is awesome, and the story, of course, is very real and flows nicely. Just a few things that I might suggest? Instead of refearing to this as a "tale" in the very beginning I would substitute "story" because the word 'tale' has such a woodsy fairy tale concept to it and distracts from the content. "And I guess two out of three isn’t bad without any help, but we’d needed help with the childre...
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