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AGE: 20
LOC: Pittsburgh, PA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 11

Those Who Have Influenced Me:

Ray Bradbury
Edgar Allen Poe
H.P. Lovecraft
Jorge Luis Borges
Annie Dillard
Edgar Rice Burroughs
and others…

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Horror / The Slaves' Wall
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As I was lead along the lightless outskirts of the indomitable fortress that presided over the landscape and my thoughts, my guide – his eyes: shining globes in the black – directed his and myself down an incline that grew gradually but increasingly steep for some time. For, he explained, the grim and wailing stone from which the Witch’s Ziggurat was wrought – that unearthly element on which no man may look and still know himself separate from the world or eternity separate from himself and s...
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Action Adventure / The Mercury Bearings
Version 1
7 Reviews   2 Comments
“Standing in the gray sands, just on the cusp of a crater, I took my breath in the light of my first Mercurian sunrise.” -- so begins my journal of the impossible. Now that everything is said and done and I have had my chance to breathe, it is obvious to me that I must chronicle all that has happened so that others may know. Every detail that I can recall or every sight that I saw or touch that I felt, recorded so that maybe someone else can theorize, ponder, and understand what we have forg...
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2 Reviews   1 Comment
"The city of Arkham has a strange darkness about it; in the air, in the people, in the events that transpire. Everything always seems cast in twilight in this city, and the strange runs rampant in the streets. It could be for any reason, considering the cities past, but that is not what these stories are about...These stories are about those who have been touched by the weird. Those who have bumped back against the things in the night. Men and women who have walked away from the supernatural ...
Poetry / Tell Me, Plain
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If my feelings have offended, my entreaties have been resented, tell me, plain, and I'll be contented that I felt love, my heart be mended But if you feel what I have felt, tell me, plain, my chest be swell'd with pride and heart and amors held of how our lives may be meld Into one rich gold tapestry of sunsets, sunrises, shared while we hold tightly together, symmetry. just tell me, plain, that you love me
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Quotes / Writers are...
Version 1
5 Reviews   2 Comments
"Writers are the most heartless breed on Earth. Every wording to make someone sob, every phrasing to make someone laugh is facticious, contrived for that very purpose. Emotions and thoughts are playthings to everyone with a pencil in their hand, but it is writers who spend their entire lives honing their abilities of manipulation. Fiction or fact, prose or otherwise, the Writer is the Con Man of choice."
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You give too much detail to properly revel in horror or suspense. What makes horror truly disconcerting are the assumptions we make, and the pictures we complete with the vague details given to us. Basically, what you imagine will always be worse than what can be conveyed in text. In later versions of this story, perhaps try not to be quite so concrete in the physical details provided. Instead, shift your focus to sensory input such as smells, and consider touching on emotional details. You h...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Casitians Return, Chapter 1
Overall, I found this to be an enjoyable read. Any issues I have with it come from the manner in which details of projects are revealed in the first couple reviewable sections. It seems slightly wordy, or forced. In a couple places, your dialogue seems stilted and forcibly marched to continue the story - such as when Marianne mentions her date. Potential candidate for revision, in my opinion. I found your use of an alien dating system to be a nice touch, and as long as you remain internally c...
Short Story / Soiree On the Styx
General comments first: Be careful of typos. Easy enough for anyone to make, not overly glaring, but they can get away from your and become frustrating. More specific, I would ask that you be careful of your imagery. You describe the diner as a 'metal cocoon' in the same breath as you say it blinds those 'audacious enough' to look upon it. I've never really meditated on the audacity necessary to look at a cocoon before, but I don't think it's all that much. Consider this when you're writing: ...
Poetry / A Psalm Of Truth
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Poetry / write me off.
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