wow very interesting.

this was interesting. i thought it was great how u did it. im not to impressed with many stories but urs surely stuck out. i tried to write a story once but never fully got into it. i call my self a haikuist a poet of sorts. ive been writing since i was eight years old

quite interesting. i enjoy the way u expressed the character in a way ive never seen before. anyone can write a story but can a person write something where it captures an imagination and prevent it from returning to normal. i can see that later in life if u decide to keep writing, your style would have evolved int o something totally different and greater then what you have now. keep up the good work!!

I ENJOYED IT. ITS FUNNY BECAUSE I WAS IN THE ARMY. I HAD LOTS OF FUN TOO. I NEVER HAD TO SHOOT ANYONE SO IM HAPPY ABOUT THAT. THE TRAINING WAS REAL SWEET TO. I ONLY HAD TO TRANSPORT GOODS AND SHIT TO TROOPS IN THE FIELD AND MAKE SURE THEY WERE WELL TAKEN CARE OF.

i thought this lyric is very creative and inspiring coming from a black man