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I think, psychologically, everyone has an affinity for women. I like the fact that Eve found Amanda. It helpes portray her helpless curiosity. I liked to think, as I read, that Eve was capable of becomming part of the "In" crowd; the open, and the shameless. I belive she was, although she had never subjected herself to the world of openly gay women. I really liked the dueling perspectives, however, it got a little convoluted and I did not know who I was at some points in the story. I did not ...

From the top, the writing was extreemely loose. This was fine however, coupled with the attitude portrayed, and the style. For a journal or diary this would be fine, and for blogging, very acceptable. However, the reason people have developed writing guideleines, and follow them, is to make reading universally easier for people who only dip into the literary community. If I did not read or write often, I believe this peice would have seemed foreign, hard to understand, and difficult to digest...