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AGE: 22
LOC: Nigeria
GEN: Male
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Screenplay / STUCK
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EXT.SCHOOL BUILDING-AFTERNOON. Black. Fade In. Music playing. In Focus JAY'S feet on the Ground. Opening Credits Roll simultaneously. A whiff of smoke is blown on the shoes. JAY - a man of the moment who always takes his time to indulge in his guilty pleasures - throws the cigarette stub and tramples it under foot and gets up. In first person view he heads toward the double doors of the building. int.school building-afternoon JAY walks in, busy students milling by past him. He says hello &...
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Short Story / Butterfly Memories
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Butterfly Memories No word could aptly describe the intensity of the afternoon sun. Its scorching rays beat down upon the earth with a ferocity that few creatures could withstand and fewer still would find serenity in. Diana sat by the louvered window, her long fingers clutching the white barricade. She marveled at the evolution of modern architecture. Social vices had obscured open windows, the portals of beautiful scenery with miniature prison bars. At least hers’ was too bad. It was ornate...
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Short Story / Spirit of Hope
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Spirit of Hope As the day drew to a close my mother’s face gradually discarded the shroud of weariness that had plagued her from sun up. She began to smile easily again. Her beautiful smile is the light of my world. I seldom talk about my mother, but today I make an exception as I make this entry into my diary. It is no small task being the first of four children. For the greater part of two decades I’ve handled my platoon of siblings reasonably well. Incidentally we are all girls. Although w...
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Short Story / A fictional Story
Its Fantastic! Works wonders and has a perfectly natural flow to it. Your character is absolutely true. Sorry I haven't been able to read all of it though i'm using a mobile browser and that works with a socket connection, i'll definitely see the end of it
Poetry / differences
Its a very emotional piece. The 1st line - "Drag me out on to the floor I'm not single anymore...' pulls you in instantly and paints a clear picture of character seeking abandonment. The ending's just right. It confirms the perception that she has given up something she loves and more than anything else desires the release it provides her.
Short Story / The Light chasers
Fantastic! The light chasers is a well constructed piece that can stand on its own. The redemption theme stands out.The character is evidently on a deep soul search for the truth - 1."William was proud of his work. He knew the face was exactly like its model for he had studied hers enough. Now he turned to Ellis Carey expectantly. & 2.There it was the thing that was off kilter. He recognized it, wondering why he hadn’t noticed it before. His father was wearing a blue striped tie and the long ...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Soul Search
Your piece is promising. You've got a great first person style that draws the reader to your character. However you've got to shed more indepth light on the Sci-Fi aspect of this piece, so I'm hoping to get to read the continuation. Your style has youth to it. I guess it aimed at a teen-young adult audience and will be most particular among girl-folk. It will enhance the appreciation of your work if you add descriptive elements.
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Salesman Always Shoots Twice
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Short Story / A fictional Story
Short Story / The Light chasers
Flash Fiction / Southern Light
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