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AGE: 29
LOC: Yreka, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 16

I would greatly appreciate any constructive criticism anyone may have to give me.  My writing is my life and I fully intend to do this professionally at some point in time.  I thiank any and all reviewers in advance, I do appreciate your words and advice.

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Poetry / Mirror
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How well you speak to me, Your eloquence dripping saccharine vowels. The lies and half truths vying for dominance. I see beyond that retched mouth, Lips lush with undelivered promises, Tongue nimble with forbidden tastes. Your vanity screams at me. I laugh because its true. This persona of yours grows tiring. How long will you hold out? I wonder when this stretched twine will snap, Carrying the weight of your world. So earnest, those eyes. Deep and intense, I see your beliefs. How can you tru...
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You left me long ago I wonder if you noticed? You look at me with sad eyes Eyes that accuse me But you left first. You probably don’t realize it I watched you fade as the years went by No passion, no warmth, no comfort. I reciprocate now. Don’t look so shocked. So now you act out Those secret touches I once yearned for They turn me cold How I loathe those moments Mocking me with insincerity I’m only a comfort to you Another one of your fine collectibles A china doll on a shelf But I’m not bit...
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Poetry / You Destroy Me
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Your lips on mine Tangy with salty tears I can’t remember why You have that affect on me Taking over my thoughts Rerouting my fears And oh, those hands Roaming over me Pulling me tightly to you I’m lost inside myself Surrounded by you Engulfed by your strength Every lick and nibble Every gasp and moan And I am forgotten How I wish it were forever This moment infinite Without reality I don’t want to let you go I’m afraid of whats out there Beyond your embrace Maybe that’s why I fight it Desper...
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Poetry / I Was Here
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And I am one born of time A grain flowing through that voluptuous form Riding that wave from rise to fall The past dims in recollection As memory fades into abandoned mines Though sinister seeds remain, poisoning The future, ah! For a glimpse! It lurks beyond a maelstrom of savage sands Slicing into me as I strive to reach forward As we all are, I am Yearning for immortality in death’s playground Lost in arid ghost filled plains How they moan and wail, beseeching Indecipherable words lost in...
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Poetry / Ashes
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Nearly inconsolable in grief, Your tears fall in perfect symmetry. Your sorrow permeating the Haunted necropolis of your soul, Bringing tepid blood flow to Thick, sluggish ichor. Your heart; rough-hewn like Tree bark, yet fragile as ash, Disappearing with each breath. It's pieces, puffballs of pain Riding out the tempest of Grief that destroys you.
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Horror / The Attic
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I enjoyed reading this, it was well thought out and brief enough not to bore. Cinderella has always been one of my favorite tales because it always seemed to be an uplifting tale of overcoming adversity while being true to yourself. I think a little more discussion of the morality of Cinderella could have been useful as it is a large part of any fairytale.
Okay that was completely irrational, totally maniacal, a little bit loony and an overall hoot. I really liked this. So cute! I swear I've had days like that. Very nicely done!
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This was shocking, grotesque, confusing, fast paced, angry, funny, horrifying and now I've run out of words to describe this. An interesting, if somewhat insane read.
Short Story / Great Art
Okay, this was funny. I loved the single-mindedness of your character. This story was well written and engaging. Well done.
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