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AGE: 22
LOC: Fortuna, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 20

I am a 21 year old stay at home mom who works from home for Melaleuca INC and does a lot of community theater. I’ve been writing since I was in kindergarten but I don’t believe I can find those pieces. I am a deeply loving person and I can find the light in the darkest places. Please review my work seriously as I take it seriously. I will do the same for you. Funny pieces are acceptable as well but…ya know…that’s not where I am right now.

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Lyrics / We're here
Version 2
11 Reviews   1 Comment
I knocked on your door Surprise I was in town You were at home so I Knocked on your door Your aunt met me without a smile I can only assume she hears us... When we think we are alone Walk in Your room is occupied by more Than your bed Your books and your Air supply You're there And I crawl in beside you You're there I can't stop here inside me I'm here And we know we should be Somewhere....else But we're here and I kiss always forever To stop the fear The shaking is something I Crave from you...
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Lyrics / We're here
Version 1
1 Review   1 Comment
I knocked on your door Surprise I was in town and you were at home Knocked on your door Your aunt met me without a smile I can only assume she hears us... Walk in Your room is occupied by more Than your bed Your books and your Air supply You're there And I crawl in beside you You're there I can't stop here inside me I'm here And we know we should be Somewhere.... But we're here
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Version 2
8 Reviews   1 Comment
Green room filled with nudity and vulnerability Almost the same I know Could I even begin-start to let you All see I really cared about your View? Flipping around poles holding costumes Holding me Holding time and Holding on.... Young boys idolize me and young girls, well Who knows what young girls are like these days I certainly wonder What my little girl is going to think of Her mama when she figures out What's going on inside her head Scenes are played out in short hand In our green room W...
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Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
Green room filled with nudity and vulnerability Almost the same I know Could I even begin-start to let you All see I really cared about your.... View? Flipping around poles holding costumes Holding me Holding time and Holding on.... Young boys idolize me and young girls...well Who knows what young girls are like these days I certainly wonder What my little girl is going to think of Her mama when she figures out What's going on inside her head Scenes are played out in short hand In our green r...
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Version 1
8 Reviews   4 Comments
Do you actually acknowledge the Reasons we stick together when We're alone Stick together like two ships of skin Held together with so much cannon fire and rope As to be confused in the fray of Kisses and caresses as One being, one light, one love We fight and don't care What cameras, lights, masses Catch us in our actions of escape Do you even still want me here or Have I made too many desperate choking mistakes when We're alone "what was it about that night" "conection in an isolating age"?...
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Lyrics / "CRUISING"
I like the overall feel. Maybe it could even be a long piece, more descriptive? I can definately feel the wind in my hair though during the chorus. Good piece.
The feeling of this piece is great. I can sympathize. When I was reading it I was really invisioning you two in the bed together with you thinking all your thoughts about how much you want the realtionship to be better. Great piece. The last line might need to be changed a little depending on how the song would sound when/if it gets recorded. I couldn't be sure until I heard it being sung.
I, adore, THIS. The fraudsters are indeed bothering the wrong site. Sometimes I wish we could all just send those guys a little virus or something. Hmm. Vengence.
Lyrics / Walk With Me
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I really agree with the opinion in this piece. I think it flows nicely though I'm not sure if you might want to include some sort of repeating chorus or if you like it more without one. I'd have to HEAR it as a song first to really know if it needed one. Good piece.
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Poetry / The Last Breath
Non-fiction / Letters to Him
Short Story / Sunrise

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