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wah-wah-we-wah. fast and furious piece. seems like you've got a theme of misplaced or forsaken responsibility here. the see-saw is overloaded for much of the piece, "you changed us you changed us" and then the last line drops the weight and we hear the recipient of the narrator's rant, even in his absence. i like that. "breath"- breathe "On line"- online caps or no caps is up to you, stylistic preference. i'd merely suggest puffing it up a little more, bring us closer to these characters, add...

Life is indeed a bitch. well said. and you wrote it down. well done too. criticisms? "Lifes"--life's make this two sentences. "Life's a bitch! Write it down!" Strong, in-your-face piece. funny, but not memorable. statement piece, no real imagery. funny though. thanks for sharing.

Don't know the creator of this piece yet, but i have an inkling. i'll know momentarily.... well, it's original, it's silly, it says a lot, sans words. it's poignant and contemporary, ie communication in the age of emoticons. and....well, it's...i don't know. criticisms? it could use real letters and words. accolades? it's like a cave painting. very primitive. yet effective. image of man spearing elk. sweet. thanks.