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AGE:
26
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 18
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 18
Hi, My name’s Matt. I’ve loved writing since I was about four years old. They say writing is like a muscle- you’ve got to keep exercising it to make it work. I’m hoping this website will help that muscle to grow. I try to fill my life with as much dumb, ridiculous escapades as possible- partly because life is short, and partly to inspire my writing. I look forward to reading your work- please read mine! My work is here for two reasons: for feedback, and to back up my online blog. For the record, I AM BRITISH. And I spell my words accordingly, such as “colour”. I end some verbs with the suffix “ise”, not “ize”. Thanks for reading.
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In early 2007 I must have looked like a dodgy bastard. Not in terms of physical appearance; but there was something inexplicable about me that just attracted trouble, no matter how much I tried to avoid it. A classic example: I’d been out with Colin on Oldham’s Yorkshire Street, apparently the third most violent street in Britain according to government statistics and the local newspaper. Driving, I spent the night sober. Not driving, and dare I mention it- banned, Colin was not s...
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In early 2007 I must have looked like a dodgy bastard. Not in terms of physical appearance; but there was something inexplicable about me that just attracted trouble, no matter how much I tried to avoid it. A classic example: I’d been out with Colin on Oldham’s Yorkshire Street, apparently the third most violent street in Britain according to government statistics and the local newspaper. Driving, I spent the night sober. Not driving, and dare I mention it- banned, Colin was not s...
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In early 2007 I must have looked like a dodgy bastard. I just attracted trouble, no matter how much I tried to avoid it. I’d been out with Colin on Oldham’s Yorkshire Street, apparently the third most violent street in Britain. Driving, I spent the night sober. Not driving, and dare I mention it- banned, Colin was not sober- far from it. Hence I took on the role of Chauffeur Supreme, and kept a watchful eye on my company- who openly described himself as “one hell of a beer h...
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You can tell you’re personally developing when someone actually rings you for moral support. They trust you to enough of a degree to call you, over everyone else, in order for them to sort their head out. I don’t think that had ever happened before yesterday. John’s ex is pregnant with his baby. I offered him my congratulations but he did not want to hear it. I was shattered from too many late nights and early mornings, but I couldn’t have stayed in at a time like this...
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Sarah is somewhat of a disreputable character. She has previously confessed- no, wait- bragged- that she has beaten up lads and that she hates Asians. She drinks pints and can generally drink most men under the table. She can definitely out-drink me. I wouldn’t really describe her as my type. Only she’s quite good-looking, and has an infectious little giggle when she flirts. Oh, and she has huge breasts. This could be why I relentlessly forgave her for her ridiculous behaviour o...
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"His blue eye"- did he only have one blue eye? Was the other a different colour? If not, the colour might be unnecessary detail. I like how we think she's a person at first, then we find out that a) she's a doll and b) he's a loon. Maybe lead us on a bit longer before breaking this to us, then the reader develops a bit more interest in the "girl". Then we all feel tricked when the doll revelation comes. We all feel like a loon then. Other than the protagonist falling in love with a doll, he c...
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Ain't got time to read the whole thing, but here's a few pointers- "Making culinary..."- This isn't a full sentence. A grammar check will also pick up a few run-on sentences. The events that unfold are intriguing and a little spooky, but your opening para doesn't bite! It describes ordinary events. Put the crazy stuff in early and grab me from the first word. If you are about to get married but then quit your job to go back into studying this will cause you a LOT of financial hardship. Your f...
The story opens with a familiar feel to it- it sounds like a lot of other writings on urbis. However at " I would very much"- the story becomes more interesting. I would start the story at this point. The whole story has a good narrative structure to it. The introduction of Dad is a surprise. The descriptions are good but the way it is written could do with an extra twist for originality's sake- maybe to make the narrator more of a certain character. Something needs including to freshen it up...
Your story opens with a description of a fairly average couple and their average lives. This needed sprucing up- It's your opening paragraph! Then you go into the issue of the girl losing weight. This should be your opening point. Let the descriptions come later. When Mr. T says, "Yeah, right"- it sounds like he's responding to his daughter's sentence, which he wouldn't have heard. I'd move it up a line. Later lines also don't make sense. If they have two receivers and can listen in, say so. ...
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