Menagerie's profile

A potentially interesting and evocative story. Clearly the writer is trying to create a hard-edged story with a heart and the writer succeeds at this at times but less so at others. There are many instances where the writer has chosen good details that help make this scene feel immediate and powerful but too often the writer falls back on generic descriptors. For example the line at the beginning that says "a blanket of four-to-six inches of snow" this sounds like a weather report. Wouldn't t...

I like it. And I think it could be ripe for expansion, though I think the concept functions well as a short or flash fiction piece, so I'm talking keeping it under 1,000 words. I think what it really has going for it is it's combination of danger and humor. Of course Caroline is an intriguing character with her "special-occasion" whiskey. Would be nice to play that up with a little more insight about here. Also, perhaps, some slipstream or magical realism elements could be highlighted with th...

Personally, I would lean toward calling this a prose poem over flash fiction as it is focused on setting a scene and evoking a single or specific moment. And it is plenty evocative. I think the choice of third-person-omniscient works in this case, especially when the final sentence invokes three names as opposed to one. As a twist, I think the three names works, especially with the final name "Grace" which carries extra meaning (not just the name but the all the meanings attached to the word ...