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AGE: 32
LOC: Australia
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 29

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CHAPTER 2 - BEFORE STELLA RAN, STELLA STALLED "You're right, there’s no excuse..." "Damn right there's no fucking excuse!” "But...” Stella tried. "There is no fucking excuse!" Stella opened her mouth to find a remedy to make it all better. "Get your shit out!” I don't want a fucking trace of you in this house.” He picked up a photo frame showing them both in happier times, "No fucking photo's!” She winced as he all too dramatically smashed it against the side of the bookcase. "No fucking deco...
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CHAPTER 1: FEET FAIL ME NOT - Eminem, Lose Yourself ***** Yes, of course she screamed. Actually it was more blood curdling shrill than a scream. The first was used to counteract the extreme impact with the ground. The second was used purely to exhale. Stella wiggled her way off her crushed suitcase and attempted to stand. “Fuck!” That was a hiss Now add to the list, a broken ankle. She tried to balance. She looked at the case. She looked up from where she jumped from. She looked at the case a...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Another Monday Special
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Monday 19th February 2007 - ANOTHER MONDAY; BUTTER THEM UP It was inevitable. Episode after episode of Antiques Roadshow showcasing extreme valuables and wares, you knew something would happen one day. Every time you saw it, your brain always asked that little question, ‘What if the Valuer breaks that $100,000 tea cup?’ You felt it in your bones. A little part of you just wanted to see it. Well, Another Monday faithful; today’s the day [well, not today, but the other day...]. Here’s the infor...
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Short Story / Safer Words
One of the best stories I've read so far, well done. The opening line was brilliant as well as the ending. There is just some minor editing to be done, like 'turn on' [add 'on'] and 'It'll never happen again'. I enjoyed the quirky IKEA like references throughout. I look foward to reading more of your work.
Quotes / I Alone
I think your 'Notes for Reviewer' is much more profound than your quote. I loved the 'rock' and 'hands upon rock' reference.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / "Do You Feel Beautiful"
This is a good and thought provoking piece. I'd like you to talk more about the Mirror of the World. The sentence starting: "A fantasy world existing in a real world where a woman’s value..." is a good statement but it's what I call a 'Motherhood Statement'. It just says something. I would like you to delve much deeper into the 'How'. How it is a fantasty, how it's unrealistic and unhealthy. That Cinderella line is perfect for what you're talking about and maybe should be the first thing you ...
Excellent quote.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / A Morning Walk on the Beach
You've painted a glorious picture of the morning. Just a few technical comments: 1. Suggest change opening line to: "I woke before the sun and watched it rise." 2. There were too many short sentences. Example: "I went for a walk afterwards, stopping occasionally to pick up seashells. On the way, I passed a fisherman... etc. The last paragraph was great, well done.
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