I think that was beautiful. I wish I could give more to but there is nothing else to say.

Well, this is interesting. I am not seeing the image you trying to paint, but I kind of see the direction you are heading im. The punctuation doestion bother me but the break in stanzas does. I feel like structurally you are ending each phrase everytime you make a new line. So maybe the punctuation might help.

I know it was kinda hokey, but I actually liked this poem. In a way it is something a 7th grader would have written, but it is entertaining and speaks to the masses. kudos.

This is really beautiful. I read it fast and first and then slowly and it made a huge difference. I think the last line is a clincher. It really closes the poem well. I don't like poems that rhyme but this changed my mind. I could really feel this poem.

I think the lines a little short for my taste. But I like it. Your poetry...if read slow...speaks of an inner sadness that is well conveyed. In my opinion you should try to use more imagery though to paint the picture you are trying to write about. As usual, I like it. Peace

I think this is good overall. At first, it was a bit confusing what the message was and in a way all the symbolism could have been distilled. It is something I think you need to read more than once to understand.

i like this poem. i do get a sense of disconnectedness from the lay out. for me, it seems as though the last line in each stanza doesn't belong somehow. again, i am wondering if that was deliberate

i really don't like this . only because i feel like you were trying too hard to sound poetic. it would work if you gave some concrete insight as to what the poem is about. if it truly is about the color white then liken it to something the reader can relate to. i never give feedback on grammar stuff like that. this was just an overall confusing poem i think needs to be re-worked. i think i see where you are going you just need to paint the picture a little clearer.

what i don't understand is the first line and how it relates to the rest of the poem. you will never be alone again, but why? what is it about the rest of the poem that leads us to believe that you will never be alone again. i like this i some of the words seem overdone like epithelium but i like this. i just want to understand why you won't be alone.

i like this a lot. i think it succinctly and creatively answers the question.