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AGE: 25
LOC: Holmdel, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 06
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Langston Hughes is an author of "living work". His sound signatures and illustrated words give breath to the contextually political, romantic, distressed, and humane subject matter of his poetry. This is almost a constant in his writings and can be correlated amongst selected pieces. There are significant sound repetition similarities in "The Weary Blues," "Dream Variations," and "Song for a Dark Girl". These similarities have to do with sound tone, sou...
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To The Lady of Flies on the Event Horizon: “Let starless dark night skies Strafe your glowing chambered eyes. As stirring maelstrom cosmos your sable pearls do shine. Grant ebon glaring eyes, grace confined so dark and wise, leer captured incandescence; this universe now dies.” Her ornamental gaze secretes, fills blackened oceans as it weeps, and frozen so, my heart retreats too cold, too black to nourish flies.   To The Lady of Flies on the Event Horizon: “Let starles...
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Poetry / I Dig Cutters
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I dig cutters Yes it's true. Though you're off a bit and bat-shit nuts, I positively love you. Dragging pins or razors from a rusty Band-aid box, along your pale and shattered frame, YOU ARE FUCKING INSANE; I love you. Your sadness, anger, fear, your wonton, soulless and depressed; all reasons reaching, reigning, feeling for a knife to press against your lonesome, cold, and snowy tender breast. Eat pills and call me crying, yelling; hating bathroom floors, vodka tears and sweat pour out fro...
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"I criticized your music, but I never heard the songs. In my own selfishness I did revel exposing others wrongs. Deep down I knew you were good. You did all the things I wish I could. In the Name of god I despised you. But, you were the one – to your own self who was true." In this part of what you have set up to be a prose piece some of the cohesiveness of the work starts to slip. Pay attention here to the modified words of Shakespeare that added as well as the bit where you claim to have de...
Quotes / Courage
Your syntax is a little to compacted here in this quote I think. courage must merit more that exhibiting how afraid one truly is. To some people fear is not an option or alternative, if it were it would appear to be the opposite of courage. Do you mean false courage like false bravado? Do you think courage does not exist? I happen to think fear does not exist. You should read the Tao Te Ching proverb 13.
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Lyrics / See You Around
I would review the syntax for the first couplet of the second stanza. It sounds clunky. Lyrically you're probably looking for a solid rhythm so check the syllabic(s) of those lines. Other than that each stanza completes it own arc storywise so there is connected-ness among all stanzas. Great Job!!!!
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