I really liked this. Being drunk and hungover is one of the most relateable things out there yet no one ever does anything for them. You need to space your writing out, it was an eye sore reading it but that is forgiven. You have to watch your tone I feel at times your tone changed. you went from present point of view to past point of view and that got confusing. I will say though, if you perhaps polish it up, you may have something here.

This was good. It was different, and I also understand it was a just a draft. I really enjoyed this and how you wrote it. I enjoyed the vocab you gave the reader/review before I actually read the story cause would have known none of those words. Your charactors were developed really well, and the story flowed easy. I think you could make more of this into an actual novel or novella. The only thing I think you should watch out for is your tone and point of view but with that said. Good work.

Ok. This was good and different. I really enjoyed it so Yes its interesting to answer your question. I liked the way the story flowed and I am interested in reading more. I loved the charactors and how real they seemed. With that said you might want to watch your tone and your point of view as well. It made it difficult at times to follow that. I am interested in reading more which is a good sign. keep up the work.

This was really good and a good fun read as a poem. I dont know what you are looking to change in it. Its told beautifully and it flows so well. dont change anything. its perfect.

I thought this was different. It was very realistic and relateable. It was an interesting story in how it flowed and was told. I didnt come across too many problems besides your tone and point of view, which you might want to watch out for the more you write. Your spelling and grammar needed a bit of work as well but all in all you did a good job.

First off I am not really familiar with a screenplay format. I understand it but I dont know if it was written in the proper way so I cant say anything about that. Your Title Endless Summer. Its already a popular iconic movie. But the title is the last thing you need to worry about it. The piece. I really liked it. At first I thought I wasnt going to like the religion pov but it was told well and I didnt find it offensive. I really like how you developed your charactors and how well the the s...

This was good. You asked decent questions that were interesting and not as generic as questions could have been.

I think you have something here. I've never read anything of yours before so I dont know what you ment by tired drug theme, or in general if the drug theme was just overdone in your opinion. "I have a hairline that is halfway between receding and baldness" is one of the best lines I have ever read. That said. The story flowed really well. It didnt get jumbled anywhere or give me a hard time which is really tough to do. Also the story was interesting, right from the gate. You wouldnt to get to...

THat was such a fantastic story and a piece of life seldom read about. you didnt push your beliefs on anyone, you told the story as it happened, and it had such a real tone to it, it makes me shiver thinking about. The ending caught me off guard cause I was engrossed in the story. This was a fantastic piece of writing. you should be proud of your self.

I liked this alot. It seemed to tell a story about the modern day world, with all its downfalls and miseries in the world. you decribed it really well.