Mrbeer's profile

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AGE: 26
LOC: Plymouth, MI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 27

“I have nothing to say / and I am saying it / and that is poetry / as I needed it”
-John Cage (is cool).

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Poetry / Honestly,
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1 Review   0 Comments
I'm actually really honest except for that my honesty isn't very kind to everyone and especially myself sometimes. I think that if you tell the truth you can only benefit yourself because there are many sides one could take with that truth. And honestly it's what you believe is the truth anyways. And usually you have to undergo impulses to decide that truth. So you can only really act like yourself. And You are always telling the truth too.
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6 Reviews   7 Comments
a lone wolf, my mouth salivates. i like the rush of a hunt- but a faint call from your thin inviting lips will calm my carnivorous ascent. bashful, even spellbound by your temptation, such telepathic radiance, and amiable nature again plays me fool to what might have been a tasty treat.
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Haiku/Senryu / uncorked
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47 Reviews   28 Comments
How open minded, light-headed bottle, asleep under Buddha's tree?
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Lyrics / My Groove
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29 Reviews   14 Comments
downtown they dance lust be sensation- uptown they drink to health and occupation- but i'm unreliant of the common cause because trust lies and love is blind? i'm feeling natural admit and know the rhythm is gift to this humble flow. our egos are tiny at a glance but personality isn't just a rant- so i saunter down for nurturing eyes, and i slip smooth into the guise, so tempting and feline as you prance, i feel needs with my lips and my hands- exonerated by my own inclination, but i am not a...
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Poetry / ABC's
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5 Reviews   2 Comments
Summer days are melting to each other. I had a real good idea, but it slipped out my ear, bounced off my t-shirt, and burnt to a crisp on the stove. Should i practice yoga? i can never get my breath right- No, i don't smoke... Cigarettes... Just take the dogs on a-nother walk- Just typo my type again- (for editorial purposes) Just kinda write in my head while I walk, and the thick humidity in my nostrils awakens a desire to simply see the day out- to watch the shadows shift and fade out sundo...
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It's interesting that you took the oak tree's viewpoint here... I think that the natural aspect of this poem implies a larger poem that has been written far longer than humans able to write. Bravo!
This is a very solid beginning. The conflict between Ishikawa's devotion to his own heritage and the Red Army will be quite interesting to see evolve. Beria's character is perfect- you made me wonder if he liked the taste of human flesh. I think that 'Werewolf' is a stretch, but really just because of his name... also the authenticity is much more entertaining instead of historical (although there is quite a lot of history involved, I understand) so keeping the characters and plot as realisti...
Poetry / Moving Out
I think the abstract would be improved with editing- the last stanza really confuses me, and I'm not saying that to frustrate you, it's just that the sentence fragments make it hard to comprehend... It makes me wanna ask a lot of questions, which is good, like money? Hmmm... like should I save my paycheck this week? Is it fair to call money bread? I'm not reading your short story until you answer my questions.
Poetry / Chocolate
Forgotten? Perhaps you were the chocolate all along...
Poetry / Iggy
I really like this poem because it emphasizes the limits of life within the ideal of love, and yet again the security involved as well... I also love it because it is a simple and visual read.