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Chemically Imbalanced and the Dog That Left Me -- The country song never written
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AGE:
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LOC: Phoenix, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 24
LOC: Phoenix, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 24
I am a 50+ year old storyteller trying to put all the stories I’ve told into a book. My eclectic works ranges from poetry to biographies, from scary to humorous, and for ages 5-100. I wish to have my stories published before I get too old to tell them all to my grandchildren. My grammar is rusty and my typing sucks… what I am looking for is to see what stories are worthy of publishing and which ones aren’t. I prefer the reviews that say “Yeah I really liked this” or “This is a piece of crap!” and why you liked it or not. Life is too short to be Nit-Picky. Besides that’s what editors are for right? I figure one way or another, with or without the critiques I’m still gonna get published. So enjoy…or try to enjoy…you get the drift.
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As I sit at my desk on that first day of school, I go over the seating charts once more. Middle School History classes. Six in all. Kids from ages 11 to 15 for a total of 188 students in all. As I look at their names, I realize that at least twelve of their names I can't even pronoun, and at least thirty of them won't or can't speak English, let alone read or write it. I have to teach to them World Geography, Government and U.S. Wars this year. Do these kids really want to learn this right no...
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The Sound of Feet The sound of little feet, a whimper and a cry. Anger or annoyance, was this the first sign? The sound of running feet, with laughter then a scream. My angel dropped his glass today; it's not as bad as it seems. The sound of shuffling feet, quietly down the hall. The turning of the doorknob, why didn't she try to call? The sound of stumbling feet, as he came into the room. Today he got laid off at work, than he hit me with the broom. The sound of scampering feet; a mission to...
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I thought well written. Although it is not the genre I usually read, I found myself totally engrossed in the action. I would have like to have seen a bit more descriptions of the area and such, especially if the reader was born after Viet Nam, they might not understand or comprehend exactly what you were seeing. Even though I grew up during that time era, I could only partially visualize what you were saying. Does that make sense? I just might order a copy though. Nice.
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Thank you so much Jay. I will take your advice and any others you would like to throw at me personally. I do not have much time to accomplish my dream of being a writer and publishing the three books I am writing. I was always the storyteller in the family and with my students when I taught. Putting it into words is so much harder. When one verbally tells a story, they do not have to worry about commas and type-o's. I suck at typing, always have. But you have brought to life the truth for all...
What an interesting concept. Having people actually stopping and listening? I love it. But I am different than most. I envisioned everything. But I feel that the average person will become annoyed due to lack of action and conversation. It will definitely be for a specific type of audience. Can an audience really sit still and not response for 6 minutes and 29 seconds? I look forward to what else you have in store. Maybe a play on all the senses, that eventually, in the end, brings the audien...
I can relate to what you are saying. I also thought about other creatures of the world, like the Black Widow who after she has her way, eats her victims...wish I could have done that legally to my first two husbands. Hahahaha. Men have been allowed to be dominate because, we as women, allowed them to. My on going joke is: God created woman second, because he screwed up so bad on his first try. Keep up the humor, the world needs it. Peace MS B
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