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LOC: United Kingdom
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"Shhhh!” Marissa whispered with a finger to her lips. Her sister’s voice seemed to be constantly loud, and if she didn’t shut up, they were going to get found out. Auree giggled, and soon both sisters were laughing uncontrollably. Marissa, being the oldest, controlled herself; the consequences if they were found out would be dire. The two of them had sneaked out of their room with the desire to look around rooms that were "strictly not allowed" and maybe spy on a few Lord'sand Lady's. Even ...
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Version 2
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"Shhhh!” Marissa whispered with a finger to her lips. Her sister’s voice seemed to be constantly loud, and if she didn’t shut up, they were going to get found out. Auree giggled, and soon both sisters were laughing uncontrollably. Marissa, being the oldest, controlled herself; the consequences if they were found out would be dire. Even so there was something comical about the two of them tip-toeing down the corridor in their night clothes and hiding whenever a servant passed. They were forb...
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Version 1
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Shhhh!” Marissa whispered with a finger to her lips. Her sister’s voice seemed to be constantly loud and if she didn’t shut up they were going to get found out. Auree giggled and soon both sisters were laughing uncontrollably but Marissa being the oldest controlled herself knowing that the consequences if they were found out would be dire. Even so there was something comical about the two of them tip toeing down the corridor in there night clothes and hiding when ever a servant passed. They...
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This is a reeeealy good piece of writing. You build the tension throughout the piece and when you start reading you dont want to stop ( Ive probably just ignored a load of people on msn ). I cant think of anything you can improve :p Well done!
It was a very enjoyable read but you had a few spelling mistakes = You put feel instead of fail and i found a few more but ive forgotten, sorry XD I got a little confused at how you laid out the speech, maybe you could leave a space in between them. I love the realation ship between Tisha and athony, its very accurate. Well done
This is a really beutiful poem and it explains in detail what it feels like to keep on pushing intill you get there. You spelt wasteland wrong but apart from that its great! :)
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