I really like the writing style here - it reminds me a little bit of Jack Kerouac's prose poetry in that it seems like it's begging to be read aloud in a conversational, slightly wistful tone. The one thing that hurts the clarity of it in my mind is that the reader doesn't know how old the protagonist is until the second stanza - I would try to incorporate that into the first stanza so it doesn't come as such a surprise. For some reason, the casual tone in which the poem is being narrated mad...

The poem develops well and has an interesting premise, but I feel like sometimes you're making some awkward contortions to fit the rhyme scheme - for instance, the phrase "you must akin," doesn't make any sense to me. I would suggest changing the rhyme scheme, allowing yourself to be a little looser with it, or possibly ditching it entirely.