NieEinEngel's profile
AGE:
26
LOC: Red Bank, NJ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
LOC: Red Bank, NJ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
Hellos. My real name’s Gabrielle. I’m a Jersey college student who likes to read, write, laugh, listen to music…the usual stuff. Can’t decide whether to major in English or psych; maybe this place will help me figure out how much future I could possibly have in a writing career.
Thanks for reading :c)
Hey, in the userpic? My head kind of looks like a penis.
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Loquacious insomniac seeking beauty; emotional connection.
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To my timid tap, no response; I gently push open peer inside, see you, step lightly in. Breeze takes the door, THUNKS it closed, you don't notice - from the back you in your thin white wife-beater before angled-open windows sighing in soft, refreshing air (warm for February) before a small, dead bonsai above hooting boasting cigar- -smoking-black-puffy-jacket-clad wannabe gangstas (who let me in 'cause I'm a chick, and I'm cute) (and I asked nicely) you from the back fluffy sandy short hair f...
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A random, pretty stranger, you wander by, chattering away on your cel phone. "Because he's crazy!"...a pause. Person on the other end probably says "So what?" "No, I mean like, seriously crazy. He goes to group. He's on medication." I don't even know you, and suddenly I kind of feel like hitting you. You've probably heard from various, asinine PC groups that being on medication doesn't make someone "seriously crazy". In this, they're right, for once. Yes, medication implies a need for it. The...
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Always a surprise, the entire skies in your opium eyes, perfectly symmetrical above two of the softest lips I've ever kissed. Again and again, my mind reels; cries in wonder, "What is this?" at such small miracles as your butterfly-brush touch - you know just where makes my hair stand on end. At your voice, that murmured steel-silk command, I lift my burning face to take in the cool currents of yours. That moment, our gaze connecting, always the same, always brand-new. Recognition. I know thi...
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This is beautiful! I love the imagery and how each type of alcohol, each stanza, can be seen as taking the reader through a different phase of life. Very cool, very "natural", really captures the feeling that I think haiku generally tries to convey. Very Zen.
This is a cool idea - it might be more powerful if in the beginning it said something like "you, who thinks you're so clever"...might make it sound more scornful, more condescending, and that would probably work well with this. It also might be good to flesh out this character of Sally Rose a little bit more...maybe give a physical description of some sort, of her innocence, her beauty, why the Jackal is so intent on destroying her. Maybe she's too "good" for her own good? Too sickeningly swe...
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Very cool - apparently somewhere in the Bible, Jesus said "Cleave the wood and you will find me; lift the stone and I am there." Wish I could remember where that was..! Anyway, this makes me think of the quote, so I guess it did its job. you rock haiku. : )
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Definitely interesting! I love the "zombie in a sundresss" thing. I would fix the title, though, unless you meant it that way as some clever post-modernistic whatever. Just sayin'.
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