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AGE:
21
LOC: Broken Bow, NE
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 19
LOC: Broken Bow, NE
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 19
I write fiction: mostly occult and poetry: mostly dark
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What mortality is this- that cruel fate has blown a deadly kiss? What life is it to lead- knowing only it will end? Is our purpose found in misery- does our misery have a function? Does it serve itself, humor a higher being- or is it just for our compunction? Hard to believe the sorrow of the truth for which the evidence can attest The truth that from life's own depths no meaning can be wrest Its empty in the sunrise, regardless of the passion it echoes in its void when the skies turn ashen I...
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I don't love you the way that I used to I don't think I know you anymore I tried to explain why I'm always so sad I needed you to understand but you wouldn't I don't know whose fault it is Days go by when I don't notice it But it never goes completely away My heart keeps breaking more each day Some days I remember how I loved you and its just like it used to be But mostly, I feel like I'm sinking hoping you'll save me but you just seem too far away I want the times I was promised but I know t...
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This piece is only borderline humorous. I love the ending but the rest is a bit over gory for my taste. There are too many grammatical errors to correct them all, I suggest spellchecker. I think this piece missed overall and could be corrected if you went through adding humor in more unexpected places. IE for grammatical correction: Gabriel: Well yes. Simba is trained to torn into peaces anyone who access him within ten meters. Hostess: When did you recognise this special talent of him? shoul...
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This piece wanders a bit much for my taste. Almost as if you are trying too hard to keep up the poetry of it. I think some of the lines are awkward. The first one is def. I think it should be she was ten and hadnt thought pain could feel like that maybe? I dont know. It just seems not right. Overall the emotion gets through well though.
I am literally dying laughing right now. I love it. You impressed a stranger on a random website so congratulations i believe that you have probably accomplished a life long goal right? I think you should write about 30 more like this and publish the shit outta them!! I would buy it. Or write a humorous book about marriage and put this in the "romance" chapter.
I think these verses seem to be very choppy and that makes it hard to put to music for me. I dont know what type or genre of music you were trying for exactly and it isnt coming across on its own.
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