Well, I can see the humor in you knowing the answer and then, unfortunately for you, keeping your mouth shut. This is not really laugh out loud funny though. As for improvements I might suggest not reinventing writing and standard English usage. The code you developed for getting rid of half of all the words read in the article by using different typefaces, brackets, and quotes, is inaccurate in describing clearly what occurred, and makes the article virtually unreadable and almost totally u...

This is quite a good creative work. It clearly gives a picture of the heart and feelings of a mother caught in this (hopefully fictional) situation. There are a few mechanical errors, line 3 "and I and struggle", line 4 "abuse have become" should be either "abuses have", or "abuse has", last line needs commas after "missing", and "soul". There seems to be a little problem with the picture painted by the piece in that it is from the viewpoint of the woman tied up and alone. But then the perso...

I really like this quote. I would like to read the whole poem that it is taken from. It speaks to me of depression, and it's long awaited, but sure, passing. The only suggestion I have is possibly to change the title to something to do with depression instead of calling it Darkness.

I was wondering what caused this piece to be listed as humor until I got to the very end. It is a perfect surprise ending which caught me totally off guard. The way you lead up to it made me think it was just one of the usual diatribes against businesspeople, I was starting to lose interest and get irritated when I was hit with the last line, PERFECT execution. Spelling error: 3rd paragraph, 1st word "sometiems".

I like the last line of this poem. Although it is from a famous song I still think it can be used well in poetry. However much of the rest seems like you forced rhymes at the expense of flow. You might try changes like, Stanza 1 Line 1&2 "Making promises that you never keep.", "Dreams grow expensive, while words grow cheap." Stanza 2 Line 1&2, was not very clear, again it seems clarity was sacrificed for rhyme. You might try making it "You say love is no guarantee." "I see it as one, natural...

This is an excellent quote for Frisbee Golf lovers. I don't have any suggestions for improvement, it is a great pun!

I am absolutely thrilled with this absurd little piece. I think it is quite excellent in a ridiculous kind of way. I think a few lines could be improved though, I would suggest changing Line 12 to "for exactly one point oh two five six seconds", the line seemed to short. Line 14 to "Unfortunately for him, neglecting to carry the remainder:" him followed by he and his didn't sound right to me. Line 15 Since you used words for numerals in the title and line 12, I would do so throughout. Line 1...

Well this paints a strong picture and carries with it the feeling of death, at least emotional, if not physical. There seem to me to be errors of execution in telling the story. First there is a baby that is never acknowledged, but then the woman rocks the cradle and reaches to pick up the baby. You also have the baby in the room but then the woman has to enter the kitchen to goto the baby. Maybe change the 4th line to "I glide across the kitchen, feet like wheels rolling over unpolished flo...

I like the theme of this poem. I think that the execution could be improved. Line 2 needs more syllables to follow line 1, perhaps "a world that is complete, sublime". Then, although this does not seem to be a rhyming poem you missed some chances to use rhyme that occurred naturally. I.e. beauty/duty, soul/goal. I would make "toward" in line 6 "to", and I would spell "beneath" completely. I really liked "no burning sorrow leaves me overcast." I think that is the best line of the piece. I thi...

I gave this high marks, although I am not often drawn to religious poems. The way this is written flows fairly well and the theme works well throughout. I would remove "Violet" from line 3, and just make it "upturned toward the sky." The second to last line should be changed too "Still, there are others that will swear". The second to last line is also my favorite for imagery. I think this is a really excellent poem. Thanks.