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AGE: 22
LOC: Canada
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 18

I had left Urbis for a very long time. Looking back on the comments I left, I realize that I have changed a lot since I left. I have much less self-esteem and confidence than I used to (which has its advantages).

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The short, vulturish man in the white lab-coat pushed his walker down the dimly lit corridor behind the blonde nurse in the green uniform. He was slightly less than half her size with stubby arms and legs. Dr.Masochist glanced in the doorways as he passed them to see the shrivelled remains of what were once functioning humans. Some were near-dead in-bed, hooked up to a variety of brightly lit machines. Others were blinking blankly ahead in their chairs, perhaps uttering an indiscernible mouth...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / How I lost My Other Hind Leg
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My name is Schmutz The Wolf. I'm old, I've got boils and sores instead of fur, and I only have two front legs. One I was born without, the other: that's an interesting story. The place I live is on an isolated continent floating in the sky, called Markel. It's a land of perpetually gray skies, charred trees and a stagnant river. It wasn't always like this but that's another story. Now on Markel I live with two other dog types and the gnomes which only I can see. Nash is a wolf like myself ex...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / 003
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You awaken to a yellow light accompanied by a loud humming. Your whiskers feel a small yet violent shaking, your fur stands up on end. The air is humid, mingled with the sweet scent of meat and popcorn. The walls are of white metal with but one vent above and the floor is a rotating glass disk. Your body begins to ache all over, within and without. The disk turns you to the massive screen door, filled with the freckled face of a ten year old human, staring blankly. Realizing your peril you ru...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Nash The Wolf
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Nash glided like a silver cloud, through darkened woods. His nose was to the ground, following the pungent scent trail of the latest threat to Galroe Island; as was his job appointed by the Wizard of the Woods. His piercing, yellow eyes scanned the forest as his pointed ears periodically shifted, keeping him aware of any minor sound, every twig snapping, every branch rustling… “Hey! Wha- *FOOOM*” Nash jumped with a yelp as the sudden noise shattered his concentration. The smell of Tobacco sm...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Schmutz V3
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The wind howls and the air is freezing You find yourself in a forest of dead, blackened trees that reach up to the grey clouds above. Although you can feel your skin on the verge of frostbite, you also feel like it is slowly being burned. Various animal skeletons litter the dusty forest floor. They grin perpetually, sending their silent invitation. Near these skeletons red mushrooms grow with porous spherical, heads and long stalks. A round light appears in the foggy distance. You begin walki...
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Quotes / Social Change
This is a good one. Indeed if you intend to bring on change, somebody always tries to stand in the way. As for changing the quote itself I'd suggest putting more emphasis on the inevitability of upsetting people. That and perhaps substituting the word "piss".
Humor/Satire / Diseases
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Dark Portal - Chapter 3
-"the worst feeling in the world" How about sleep-paralysis? -"I would do ... you're thinking" Referring to the reader is something I haven't seen in the fantasy section on Urbis (are you sure it will work)? - My hair dripped grey-black, gritty water onto my face..." It would be interesting if it had a smell -"Blood. Blood was flowing freely...it was huge and almost spurting blood." That was a good bit of description. Overall you would do well be more descriptive. You'd do well to learn the c...
Haiku/Senryu / Untouchable
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Haiku/Senryu / Water Realm
"Reflect secret dreams" seems a bit cheesy. Though I can see a crystal cave with some manner of water in it. Good job.
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