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AGE: 21
LOC: Jamaica, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 18
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Poetry / She Is
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4 Reviews   2 Comments
SHE IS She is covered in sin Views the world through broken eyes Breathes the solid pain which slash her veins Curse the bitter rain, which never fades Deceitful glee forms… Flawlessly flimsy Such bashful, infectious smiles Indispensable lies Make her crumble inside Hunger to cry She is numb, so damn cold An existence within a fetal soul Her blood flows… So unpleasantly slow Dark as red wine, she’ll watch as it goes… The blade dips The sting of tears And her hurtful eyes She’s beyond redempt...
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Poetry / Once Again
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2 Reviews   0 Comments
ONCE AGAIN I yearn to run my fingers within your grief A malicious dagger to my errant core Each and everyday still you burn me through, anew I plead to be apart from you Still the victor in this delusional game we play Forever remaining the whole of things The one you declare Until death consumes us whole Pleading, let me be apart from this Sweetly and vindictively intense Cutting you down Each and everyday such misery we make All for the love we take Continuously trying to forsake Many time...
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Flash Fiction / Dead on his feet
Wow. I like it is so awesome. "When he arrived in orbit, Death did his job one last time and settled in for a well deserved nap." I especially love that part.
Novel Treatments / 1 2 3 4
Hmmm I enjoyed it. It's different...has depth. This is just awesome...really it is. I hope you keep up the fantastic work. I would love to read more of your work. Best of luck!
You have a perfect score in my books. And I'm pretty sure other will definitely agree! You have such a profound way of writing! Gosh I truly can't believe you only 19! I could almost envy you!!! I hope you all the best with your writing. This really touched me though...my Father was never around. Best of luck.
Poetry / Le Brio
You have some great talent. I really enjoy your work. It's so unique…wonderfully deep. It truly is crazy how brilliant your poems are and that your only 17 years old. Very nice…
Poetry / And I'm Safe
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Lyrics / My Broken Butterfly
Haiku/Senryu / Prayer Book (I)

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